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Empty Houses, Filled With Pain
Contributed by
Silent-No-More
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Wednesday, 24th May 2006 @ 12:52:40 AM in AEST
Topic:
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Eventually,
You cant resist the temptation
To turn the mirrors around
(to avoid seeing yourself
fall apart, again and again).
Eventually,
You give up on the slicing
And dicing of niceties
(for having realized the holes
in them never really go away).
Eventually
Time, a precious grain of sand,
Slips, inconsiderately, away
Through helpless hands.
Eventually
The reality of pain comes home
Pouncing, unexpectedly, on you
Whenever youre alone.
Until eventually -
Becomes a word you
No longer wish to hear.
~
But, eventually
You learn to live with pain
And
You use that word again...
Eventually.
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Silent-No-More
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Re: Empty Houses, Filled With Pain
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by ever1der on
Wednesday, 24th May 2006 @ 01:01:50 AM AEST
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| I wrote a poem once about facing a mirror..and not being able to stand what I saw..it was posted once..I liked your poem very much..whatever the sad news is; I'm sorry. |
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Re: Empty Houses, Filled With Pain
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by emystar on
Wednesday, 24th May 2006 @ 01:09:59 AM AEST
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Awesomly written.
hang tuff.
luv, huggs, prayer,
emy |
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Re: Empty Houses, Filled With Pain
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Wednesday, 24th May 2006 @ 07:00:31 AM AEST
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Snemmy~
I'm so sorry for the news you got tonite. Pain sadly produces sometimes the most extraordinary pieces of poetry. May ur wounded heart heal and the pain ease real soon my dear friend. May ur days ahead be much brighter dearest Snemmy~
*big heartfelt hugs*
~*suzie Q*~ |
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Re: Empty Houses, Filled With Pain
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by Archie on
Wednesday, 24th May 2006 @ 08:22:34 AM AEST
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| I can relate to this poem very well and the word that comes to mind is hope. I hope I can keep hold of it as well as everyone. |
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Re: Empty Houses, Filled With Pain
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 24th May 2006 @ 09:18:45 AM AEST
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More than once I've been almost speechless in my commenting today all i can say is...
From your pain you've produced a great poem.
J. |
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Re: Empty Houses, Filled With Pain
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by spencer on
Wednesday, 24th May 2006 @ 09:49:05 AM AEST
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| This poem is stunning |
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Re: Empty Houses, Filled With Pain
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by Vampirequeen on
Wednesday, 24th May 2006 @ 02:56:26 PM AEST
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I can also relate to what your saying in this poem.Awsome write snemmy
take care
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Re: Empty Houses, Filled With Pain
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by Fionndruinne on
Wednesday, 24th May 2006 @ 05:41:31 PM AEST
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Very well done, my friend. There's a lot of facing-up to the sadness which is part of life (half of life maybe I should say), but in a responsive, intelligent way. Thus there's a lot of depth, melding nicely with the strenth of the (quite polished) form.
Well done.
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Re: Empty Houses, Filled With Pain
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by deadheadpoet on
Thursday, 25th May 2006 @ 12:03:24 AM AEST
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Wow, Snem. I liked the repitition of ..."eventually"..made it hit harder. The last stanza, oh gosh...so painfully true. Thank you for sharing such an excellent write,
Peace, Laura |
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Re: Empty Houses, Filled With Pain
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 25th May 2006 @ 02:25:52 AM AEST
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Snemmy, thank you very much. I've already explained how deeply this touched me. You are a wonderfully sweet & compassionate sweetheart.
This is quite possibly my favorite poem of the year...maybe even a lifetime. I will never forget it and nor forget how thoughtful you are.
And yes, it is an awesome poem. Your awesome way of taking those "fateful" words that wait for us and arranging them upon a page will never cease to amaze me.
Love,
Timber
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Re: Empty Houses, Filled With Pain
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by Willofree on
Thursday, 25th May 2006 @ 12:09:57 PM AEST
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Very well portrayed. At least with pain we are not empty. Yet being empty can be very painful, I guess. I remember one time when I felt so much pain that I couldn't bear to look at the family pictures on the wall. So I turned them around...being seperated and alone in the house hurt too much.
Yes, an "Empty House, Filled With Pain"
Thanks for sharing Snemmy
Will |
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Re: Empty Houses, Filled With Pain
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by Baronhawk on
Saturday, 27th May 2006 @ 11:55:06 AM AEST
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Both the beauty and agony of words is that they can transfer the indigents of the author's feelings to the audience. Sometimes it is through skill and others it is through the rawness of the emotions present. Mayhaps I too am in sombre moods nowadays but I find a certain beauty to this write. I can feel both the heartwrenching reality of the pain portrayed and yet also the calm acceptance that follows..."Eventually". It is unfortunate that such sadness is needed for a write of such depth but I do honestly feel that this is both a genuine expression as well as a skillfull rendition. I wish you hope, luck and better days beyond this pain while I do applaud your exquisite write that this is, at least to my heart, mind and eyes.
"...pain is the benchmark of life...for its existance confirms our lives...while its acceptance shapes our humanity...one never truly understands...until he or she finds the pain that eventually is..." |
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Re: Empty Houses, Filled With Pain
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 28th May 2006 @ 09:50:03 PM AEST
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There are some fine lines here. The most notable I feel is "until eventually becomes a word you no longer wish to hear"-that's poetry.
The theme is sad and universal-the factual sadness of inevitability, it is something accessible to everybody, and indeed, everyone who reads this will no doubt conjure an unique explication tailored to their circumstance.
painful and articulate,
you're welcome
black
'Keep the situation dark,
let the tinsel linger-
that's how you'll create the universe" (Emma lew) |
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Re: Empty Houses, Filled With Pain
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by xxTiaxx on
Monday, 29th May 2006 @ 08:47:48 PM AEST
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| Excellent. The other commentors have said enough... You know that it's a great poem. |
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Re: Empty Houses, Filled With Pain
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by ButchHoward on
Tuesday, 30th May 2006 @ 05:26:39 PM AEST
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This is a somber and beautifully written poem. The emotions expressed here effectively confront the intense emotional pain involved in facing deep sorrow. The repetition of the word "eventually" is lovely here, because it gives the piece a feeling of hope, through perseverance.
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Re: Empty Houses, Filled With Pain
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by Man_On_High on
Wednesday, 31st May 2006 @ 09:10:01 PM AEST
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My condolences Snems.. on whatever might be ailing you today-
thoughts and prayers.. right out to you~
..the work was magnificent as well.. as always.
In peace,
B
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Re: Empty Houses, Filled With Pain
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by silent on
Wednesday, 16th August 2006 @ 08:42:41 AM AEST
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Poems such as this which is so very strong and inside alot of us but some know it by face not just a shadow, are comforting and by just sharing you have given an amazing feeling of relation to so many. Thank you for sharing, it's a masterpiece in everyway. I hope you have come to acceptance of sorts for whatever brought this on.
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Re: Empty Houses, Filled With Pain
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by Uncertain_Oblivion on
Tuesday, 12th September 2006 @ 05:01:42 PM AEST
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you're becoming one of my favorite poets...
VERY well done. I loved it. |
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Re: Empty Houses, Filled With Pain
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by needledancing on
Thursday, 8th March 2007 @ 11:58:12 PM AEST
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| Wonderfully expressed. thank you |
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Re: Empty Houses, Filled With Pain
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 12th January 2009 @ 01:39:17 AM AEST
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I just wanted to tell you that I have learned to live with the pain. Not that it doesn't still hurt, but I am dealing with it much better.
Forever grateful,
Tim |
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Re: Empty Houses, Filled With Pain
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by Tiny_Tina on
Monday, 23rd July 2012 @ 12:42:08 AM AEST
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Timotheus gave me a list your-poetry.cm to read and this was the first one on the list. Must say he's right. knowing what this concerns has brought on tears. he's right. You're great!
Thx,
TT |
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