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He Says....( he thinks)
Contributed by
Rakerman1999
on
Saturday, 27th May 2006 @ 08:40:05 PM in AEST
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My trust for you
is endless
and eternal
( Wouldn't believe you if you said the grass was green)
You are sweeter
than a rare
and fragrant nectar
( For a woman who is calloused, cold and mean)
You have breathed
unto my soul
and I am weakened
( more than likely 'cause your breath is rank and stale)
And your face
shines as the Harvest
Moon of Autumn
( rather lifeless , pocked with holes and kinda pale)
Copyright ©
Rakerman1999
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2006-05-27 20:40:05]
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Re: He Says....( he thinks)
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by ever1der on
Saturday, 27th May 2006 @ 08:46:43 PM AEST
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This is really clever..I loved the last part.. can I do a "she said"
.........??? |
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Re: He Says....( he thinks)
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by LOWMAN613 on
Saturday, 27th May 2006 @ 11:24:45 PM AEST
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| Clever & interesting never read anything like this ! I liked it! Great job. Christina |
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Re: He Says....( he thinks)
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by Spike on
Sunday, 28th May 2006 @ 08:52:12 AM AEST
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Don't worry Larry, we all need to vent. Different from what I've read of yours before, but I for one am glad that you're digging into different parts of your psychological and emotional repetoire, beyond your flawless and smooth cornered love poetry.
Spike
p.s. it is funny! reminds me of those cartoons in Mad magazine, where people are saying and doing things but their shadows are showing the true story.
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Re: He Says....( he thinks)
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 28th May 2006 @ 05:41:30 PM AEST
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Larry~
Well I hope by the author's note that you meant this in a lighthearted fun
kind of fashion . . . on accounta it had me chuckling to myself. [and
nodding in a "oh boy do I know what you mean!" sorta way]
Excellent conception of thought here, Larry. Incredibly done!!
~Breezy
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Re: He Says....( he thinks)
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by candysears on
Monday, 29th May 2006 @ 07:29:46 PM AEST
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Great write...Kinda funny in a way..
I enjoyed reading it.
God Bless!
C.S |
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Re: He Says....( he thinks)
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by ladyfawn on
Friday, 27th April 2007 @ 02:09:06 PM AEST
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roflmao!!! too cute!!
love n' hugs nessa |
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