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Magic Bed
Contributed by
Man_On_High
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Sunday, 4th June 2006 @ 02:11:41 AM in AEST
Topic:
DreamsandWishes
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When I was a boy my bed was the ship
that voyaged me far throughout the star-clustered night
to lands forever beyond the world's lip
dark burning olive lands of delight-
across blood-red oceans under the stars
lorded by the scarlet splendor of Mars..
and always the night was loud with the roar
of flame-nostrilled horses flying over the waves
bearing great urns of nectar to a diamonded shore
to maddened fat kings and despoil obsequient slaves..
and high over the enchanted orb of my eye
bright galleons of singing men passed in the sky
and they sang of strange things - all glory and fire-
of water turning to wine and men rising from the dead
and I trembled with a wild and fearful desire
at things that filled me with such joy and such dread-
and their songs filled the hidden places of my heart
till part was whole and whole was part.
Climbing to bed in that lost magical time,
I was ascending to great secret galaxies of truth
where all meaning remained a singular rhyme
that would open only to the sleeping beauty of youth-
and my ship was beautiful strong and clean
sailing to glories by mere eye unseen..
merely but a bed now with spread.. complete in red and brown
and the sheets just rusty chains barely holding me down.
Billy
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Re: Magic Bed
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 4th June 2006 @ 02:58:35 AM AEST
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| Great read. It was very visual. |
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Re: Magic Bed
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by ham323 on
Sunday, 4th June 2006 @ 06:38:52 AM AEST
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| O0o0o0o0o0o0o0o. I like this one. Makes me think of playing pirates when I was a little kid. But then the part where it says "water turning to wine" I really like that part. Love your poem! Good work. *Five Stars* |
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Re: Magic Bed
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by wizard on
Sunday, 4th June 2006 @ 09:43:22 AM AEST
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awesome write bro...i know we've talked about this before...glad to see it posted.
wizard |
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Re: Magic Bed
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 4th June 2006 @ 12:38:07 PM AEST
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What an imagination! You have presented a serious allegorical masterpiece here.
There is an element of mythical fantasy that I find irresistable. . . like being taken
on a magical journey.
As ever, your eloquence with the English language is so painfully obvious. Beautiful
piece, Billy. Softly romantic in a way. (speaking of the enchantment that it creates)
*loves this*
~Breezy
(who feels that the magic of youth is only lying dormant in us -
we need only remember . . . ) |
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Re: Magic Bed
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by Jenni_K on
Sunday, 4th June 2006 @ 01:03:27 PM AEST
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Great imagery had from this...wonderful write, Billy. And today, parts of your dream have come true..
Remarkable write..
Jenni |
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Re: Magic Bed
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by ButchHoward on
Sunday, 4th June 2006 @ 10:36:12 PM AEST
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Whoa! Beautiful choice of words, rythm, visual imagery and rhyme that instantly transported me back to my childhood. Magical!
Butch |
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Re: Magic Bed
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by Vampirequeen on
Sunday, 4th June 2006 @ 11:10:19 PM AEST
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wow what an imagination you have so refreshing.I love this write.lol
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Re: Magic Bed
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by emystar on
Monday, 5th June 2006 @ 05:32:49 AM AEST
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I'd say that is a very magic bed. I hope u didn't get rid of it.
Bog smiles,
emy |
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Re: Magic Bed
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by brew on
Monday, 5th June 2006 @ 09:16:09 PM AEST
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For the bed represents the ship you set a sail now..See things fall in place , yet may take time.! This is a wonderful and inspiring write.! Keep the thoughts of what is wanted...it can be done........YOU know that all too well......Just a lovely write.....
Hugs
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Brew~ |
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Re: Magic Bed
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Wednesday, 7th June 2006 @ 12:07:43 AM AEST
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Billy~
This takes me on a journey of when I was young and how innocent our dreams were back then. We were free to dream of these gorgeous things, but sadly in adulthood nightmares & reality plague our minds.
Dream on my dear friend and don't let anything spoil ur beautiful dreams.
May all of ur dreams and wishes come true.
A most outstanding and well executed write penned by the remarkable "M.O.H"
Keep 'em coming sweet guy.
love n hugs from ur fan/friend,
~*suzie Q*~ |
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