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Slurring in Silhouettes
Contributed by
hauntedscorp
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Saturday, 10th June 2006 @ 08:17:25 PM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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Breathed in crystalline apparitions, a woeful resuscitation
precariously on the edge of hesitation; a soliloquoy of devastation
A cluster of light drenches in breathless vapors
surrounded by the misshapen frenzy of unsavory capers
Please don't put your life in my hands...
A spirit cries in anger when the brain twitches lifeless
fingers lingering, quivering, in a shank of blackness
A sleepy affair that's mistaken to be gravely inclined
hope slides away for the soulfully undermined
Fear sinks into the uncanny...
Eyes without a soul --- just a penetrating hole
the landscaping thieves; what's familiar is seized
In disquieting moments left to contemplate
how a newly sobering reality inebbriates
Wintry blizzards of angst...
Hawking in miserly fashion, the lull is platonically undressing
casually smitten, it's valor probes; strategically caressing
Eavesdropping in hushes that favours the uncouth
warily driven; we're conversing knee-deep in the truth
Collapsing in radiant exposure, it falls; bedridden...
A flash in the pan for all that's sold, lies marry fact when the story unfolds
misguided; one's inclined to brag, struck red-faced when the cat's out the bag
Spurned by action, then minus the motion that time has elapsed
still sheepishly divided in notions that the future has grasped
With exquisite strokes; paint the sky slain with dawn.
Copyright ©
hauntedscorp
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2006-06-10 20:17:25]
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Re: Slurring in Silhouettes
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by ForeverAlone on
Saturday, 10th June 2006 @ 08:51:00 PM AEST
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wow, and someone gave this a 1 out of 5 stars. I would bet my eyes they are jealous. Regardless Scorp, its been awhile since i read anything of yours and i enjoyed this alot and thought it had alot of passion and freshness to it that many poems lack. Awesome Job
~Clark |
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Re: Slurring in Silhouettes
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by shelby on
Saturday, 10th June 2006 @ 09:10:06 PM AEST
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first of all thanks for the sweet comment.
Secondly this is incredible! Iv missed your flare and talent with the smoking pen. This creeps deep inside my mind I love it!
So nice to see you back.
Michelle |
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Re: Slurring in Silhouettes
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 10th June 2006 @ 10:05:17 PM AEST
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Very deep and dark
but well writen kept me
on the edge of my wits
thinking about what the poem was
all about
great job
and blessings
on many more poems to come
and guess who's back
thats right me lol |
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Re: Slurring in Silhouettes
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by Man_On_High on
Saturday, 10th June 2006 @ 10:32:31 PM AEST
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It's good to see you again Scorp..I've missed your work..utterly-
I had barely time enough to breath while reading this..(the pain)
..and when I did, it wasn't long before the wind was knocked out of me.
Your both appreciated and admired by many here Scorp.. I hope you can find at least, some solace in that.
very moving, your words.. just as I remember-
B
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Re: Slurring in Silhouettes
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by Willofree on
Saturday, 10th June 2006 @ 10:52:55 PM AEST
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A very complex and intreguing write. I'm not sure I understand it all. It has a rather primal tone to it.emotionally...dealing with relationship, anger and perhaps loss. The imagery and wording is very potent. The title is top shelf, very good.
A beautifully crafted poem, Scorp
Will, I don't know where I've been, bur havent seen you on line for awhile. IT's good to read your work again. |
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Re: Slurring in Silhouettes
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by wizard on
Sunday, 11th June 2006 @ 02:03:06 AM AEST
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wow scorp...this is absolutely stunning..really i was floored by this...
nice to have you back,
wiz |
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Re: Slurring in Silhouettes
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by emystar on
Sunday, 11th June 2006 @ 02:47:07 AM AEST
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Well done.
Welcome back.
luv, huggs, smiles,
emy |
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Re: Slurring in Silhouettes
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 11th June 2006 @ 03:24:38 AM AEST
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How refreshing and long awaited to see another Scorperiffic poem!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
(((((((((((((((((((((((((((((( Scorpenator ! ! ! ))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))
Not quite sure what it all means but can definitely feel some powerful emotion / metaphors there. Seems there was some apprehension, hurt, and betrayal goin' on.
I'll read it again and again because my mind has been a bit overwhelmed and/or numb as of late so my comprehension hasn't been at it's best but I do know that I thoroughly enjoyed despite my lack of cranium function.
the lull is platonically undressing Awesome line!
TIMber
:-)
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Re: Slurring in Silhouettes
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 11th June 2006 @ 11:37:21 AM AEST
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Dear Scorpy~
First let me say WELCOME HOME!!! lol
I have dearly missed your writes, [and your companionship].
Glad to have you around again.
Now . . . this write initiates thought as to just where your
mind has been these past few months. I can't put my
finger on just what emotion this piece invokes in me.
I find it somewhat sad, and yet not; somewhat strong,
and yet not; somewhat accusatory, and yet . .. not.
Whatever it IS, it is filled with an introspection
that leaves me comtemplaing.. the last stanza
especially demands a clear attention!!
Nice to see you never stopped writing and you still
have an amazing gift for expression. I loved this.
~Breezy |
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Re: Slurring in Silhouettes
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 12th June 2006 @ 10:44:17 AM AEST
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I am sorry that you had such a rough time if that is what this reveals. I am also glad that (if) it also reveals the uncertainty that you had in returning here, I for one (among many) am glad, no, ELATED that you chose to come back.
You have been sorely missed. |
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Re: Slurring in Silhouettes
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Monday, 12th June 2006 @ 07:51:19 PM AEST
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OMG, where have u been girl? I have freakin missed u. You have been sorely missed sweet girl.
Your sad, but magical masterpieces are so welcomed here dearest Scorp. A most gifted and talented Miss who graced our hearts with her work has returned once again to the delight of her admiring fans, me been one of them. Missed u girl and a Big Welcome back.
love n hugs from ur fan/friend,
~*suzie Q*~ |
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Re: Slurring in Silhouettes
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by candysears on
Monday, 12th June 2006 @ 10:06:39 PM AEST
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WOW...You are one of the greatest poets..I love this write..I try to read all your posts...You are a great poet..
God Bless! |
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Re: Slurring in Silhouettes
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by secretwind on
Saturday, 17th June 2006 @ 07:28:40 PM AEST
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| EXCELLENT |
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Re: Slurring in Silhouettes
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by ladyfawn on
Wednesday, 2nd July 2014 @ 11:59:55 PM AEST
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first off i absolutely love the title, and i so love the poem! every line is more
deeply poetical than the previous yet it winds, bends and flows like a river, a
river of beautiful words, and that last line! wow and wow! i bow scorp, i bow,
hugs n' love nessa
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