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Public Commute
Contributed by
Man_On_High
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Monday, 12th June 2006 @ 12:41:33 AM in AEST
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..trapped and beleaguered in a web of constants
garrolous and unto the point of endurance..
commuters on the T..
set upon ushering in the new day
with an unsure wheezing of do-good intentions:
often looking at each other across the littered chasm
of crumpled morning news, empty coffee cups and the like;
awaiting the inevitable sign of departure.
Dissolute and mindless, would otherwise find me
crawling into the backseat of a cab.. the driver:
someone who knew better 'way back when' but never escaped..
bruising the reeking walls with ballads of yesteryear,
roaring the conquests of nubile native daughters who,
no-doubt, were long removed by his lascivious gaze and tooth alone-
..not knowing my intolerance
for dimwit.. all the while, a happy man.
B.
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Re: Public Commute
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by Vampirequeen on
Monday, 12th June 2006 @ 12:47:25 AM AEST
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wow that was great
I can really understand what your saying.
awsome write
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Re: Public Commute
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by emystar on
Monday, 12th June 2006 @ 01:33:47 AM AEST
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Very thought provking.
huggs,
emy |
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Re: Public Commute
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by wizard on
Monday, 12th June 2006 @ 09:33:13 AM AEST
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awesome write, bro.. perfect in every way!!
for some reason i immediately think of the "cigarette bum" that we often talked about..lol
wiz |
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Re: Public Commute
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 12th June 2006 @ 02:32:58 PM AEST
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| The image of being there and of the feelings associated with them really come through in this write!!! |
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Re: Public Commute
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by jyssvw22 on
Monday, 12th June 2006 @ 02:35:55 PM AEST
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This is my morning…every morning….however if I get to work on time and in one piece im willing to deal with “ crumpled morning news, empty coffee cups and the like;”…as I read and wait my “ inevitable sign of departure”
Nice as always
Your fan-
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Re: Public Commute
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Monday, 12th June 2006 @ 07:19:56 PM AEST
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Billy~
A most descriptive write of those transport riding days. When one reads ur remarkable work it's as if they are their experiencing the whole thing. You are really good at placing ur reader exactly where you want them to be.
You never cease to amaze me Billy~ well worth the read as always. Keep it up sweet guy.
love from ur fan/friend,
~*suzie Q*~ |
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Re: Public Commute
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by brew on
Monday, 12th June 2006 @ 08:07:25 PM AEST
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So glad I do not have to ride the rail here.! Well at least not yet.! Im 10 mins form work, yet Im the one rusing out for I always have to have me coffee; and HATES being late for anything...EVER>!!!!!!!!!!!! Perfect write, for most
Always
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Re: Public Commute
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 13th June 2006 @ 07:44:44 PM AEST
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ACK! You fogot to mention the humid, greasy stench
hanging in the air like a thick fog. . . .
oh wait- that's MY van!!!! LOL sorry . . . okay
*puts on serious face*
A vivid and descriptive take on commuting, dear Billy. I must say,
you have an incredible gift for making even the most mundane of
activities that much more intriguing. Dare I say, even profound!!
Splendid write hun-
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