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..to be a man
Contributed by
Man_On_High
on
Tuesday, 13th June 2006 @ 10:46:41 PM in AEST
Topic:
fantasy
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While I'd yet much to be a man,
I'd fallen for an almost courtesan..
with truthful and immediate eyes
and no time for haggling compromise.
Just 'fore July and in the shade,
upon my lips she plied her trade
and more for pity then quicker coin;
she'd chosen me to be conjoined.
She'd look right through me..and duely saw
the lineaments of a lesser law
and with dexterity of hand and tongue,
brought me the pleasure of being young~
She drew maps I did not understand
that took me on to the promised land;
like the greatest ship with sails undone,
bronzed, naked.. under the noontime sun.
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Still in the complimenting shade
with lip and tongue and hand she played
grand symphonies now so defined,
beyond the slipping of my mind.
With wind-swept hair and blouse unfurled,
she held the wisdom of my world..
defining me a rabid beast
for an unforgiving moment's lease.
Beyond the sieze, into the flame
of setting sun - from whence she came;
and so I'm back where I began,
still 'reaching' yet to be a man.
Billy
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Man_On_High
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Re: ..to be a man
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by wizard on
Tuesday, 13th June 2006 @ 10:56:05 PM AEST
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awesome write bro...i loved it...the last two stanzas are great..
wiz |
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Re: ..to be a man
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by Vampirequeen on
Wednesday, 14th June 2006 @ 12:57:28 AM AEST
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I agree with the wiz man lol.
awsome write Billy |
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Re: ..to be a man
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by Elizabeth_Dandy on
Wednesday, 14th June 2006 @ 04:02:05 AM AEST
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Yes awesome Billy.
Tragically awesome.!
lessings
Elizabeth |
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Re: ..to be a man
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by emystar on
Wednesday, 14th June 2006 @ 06:15:49 AM AEST
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Wwwwwwwwwwwwwoooooooooooooo!
Incrediably live write here.
No going to sleep while reading this.
huggs, big smiles,
emy |
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Re: ..to be a man
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by brew on
Wednesday, 14th June 2006 @ 07:28:29 AM AEST
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What a wonderful and fantazing, write indeed.!
Makes the reader become compelled into the words.
*wonderful*
Hugs
Brew~ |
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Re: ..to be a man
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 14th June 2006 @ 06:06:47 PM AEST
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Sweet Billy~
An interestingly provocative write - [is it hot in here or what?]
Your diversity is outstanding! I am both surprised and impressed
with each new write. [I keep thinking there must be something he
can't write about] But no! Every thing you lay down makes for an
incredible read and is a hallmark to the talent you possess.
I really enjoyed this one. sooooooo stirringly sensual and sultry. ; )
~Breezy
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Re: ..to be a man
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by bronzen on
Wednesday, 14th June 2006 @ 07:07:16 PM AEST
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| i loved this write |
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Re: ..to be a man
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by candysears on
Wednesday, 14th June 2006 @ 08:28:22 PM AEST
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Top notch for this piece..
Beautiful..
I enjoyed reading this..
God Bless! |
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Re: ..to be a man
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Friday, 16th June 2006 @ 12:20:00 AM AEST
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~*Billy*~
Um, where's the switch for the fan, lol.
A sensual, provocative write that leaves ur devoted fans feeling the desires and emotions that play in ur mind. It comes to no surprise that u are able to produce outstanding, interesting and enthralling writes. A poet makes a great lover. This is shown through the way u express urself throughout ur magnificient write.
Impressive as always, but u knew I was gonna say that didn't u, lol. Most enjoyable dearest Billy~ Keep up the brilliant work.
love from ur devoted fan/friend,
~*suzie Q*~ |
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Re: ..to be a man
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by Silent-No-More on
Tuesday, 11th July 2006 @ 10:16:18 PM AEST
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You know... I don't think I'm brave enough (yet?) to write a piece like this. The fact that you can/do impresses me - and how well you do impresses me more.
Wishing I had written this (though - LOL - a couple of the lines would definitely not be applicable then, eh? hee) -
~Snem |
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