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UnDone
Contributed by
MachineGunBarbie
on
Monday, 19th June 2006 @ 06:38:55 PM in AEST
Topic:
AmericanTragedy
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Breathe deep
I'm coming undone
with you there's no relief
without you there's no one.
You flew into me
you stayed close for so long
I turned away for a moment
and when I looked,
you were gone.
These memories bleed.
Inside my head,
I scream.
Within these four walls,
I dream
while the night slips into dawn.
You should be here,
I believe.
I cut the flesh until there's nothing,
I'm relieved.
I write down these words in my head,
until there's none.
The time crashes into my sleepy eyes
the cold air rushes through my window,
and reminds me I'm alive.
I take a breath and swallow all the tears,
until they die.
All the years
until they die
All my fears
until they die,
I'll swallow myself until there's none.
I breathe deep,
I'm coming undone.
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MachineGunBarbie
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Re: UnDone
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by Vampirequeen on
Monday, 19th June 2006 @ 07:00:40 PM AEST
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I am sorry to hear about your pain.
Its really the reality of life i guess.
You worded this poem really well.
good job |
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Re: UnDone
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by wizard on
Monday, 19th June 2006 @ 08:43:52 PM AEST
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what an awesome write...really, i loved it completely..i can relate to this 100 percent, as most of my writes are about the same topic..
excellent post!
wiz |
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Re: UnDone
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by ever1der on
Monday, 19th June 2006 @ 09:21:33 PM AEST
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| someone I loved a lot once told me to "breathe"...or he would say, "take a breath baby gurl"...I would stop, breathe really deep..exxhale slowly... it helped. nice poem..it was a reminder.. |
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Re: UnDone
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by a7x36 on
Tuesday, 20th June 2006 @ 12:28:43 AM AEST
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| favorite line >>>> "i'll swallow myself until there's none" |
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Re: UnDone
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by Davinah on
Tuesday, 20th June 2006 @ 05:38:47 AM AEST
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Very touching.... I suppose a lot of people can relate to this. I sure can...
Absolutely wonderful write!
~Davinah~
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Re: UnDone
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by myselfindreams on
Tuesday, 20th June 2006 @ 12:43:10 PM AEST
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| very sad poem here, found myself into it deep |
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