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LoveQuest
Contributed by
spike
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Tuesday, 20th June 2006 @ 07:14:33 AM in AEST
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'Heroine' by Jenny Dolfen www.goldseven.de.
Too soon the warrior falls,
The blade of truth, cold reality
Armour and amore
No defence against hearts frailty
Too soon the lovers kiss,
The sweet thrill of anticipation
Dulled by whats amiss
Extinguishing conflagration
Too soon the poet writes,
The muse in no disposition
Words that could swoon many
Fall flat in composition
To soon the warrior rises,
Too soon the lovers kissing
Too soon the poet picks up the pen
For the heart is always searching.
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Re: LoveQuest
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by myselfindreams on
Tuesday, 20th June 2006 @ 11:44:11 AM AEST
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| I love this poem, it rules |
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Re: LoveQuest
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 20th June 2006 @ 01:27:56 PM AEST
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| I'm kinda mind blank to comment, other than I sure do like the way ya create a captive atmosphere with your words. I'd have t' have a conversation with ya 'bout "too soon" 'cause time's a wastin', Spike! Ya made me look up that word conflagration. Thanks, teach. |
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Re: LoveQuest
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by jerseysue on
Tuesday, 20th June 2006 @ 01:52:15 PM AEST
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| I'm not a hopeless romantic, but I am the eternal optimist, who considers that one day things will be perfect. Yes but all the trials we face have been carefully written into this beautiful piece of poetry. A quest of love it surely is. Sue x |
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Re: LoveQuest
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by Vampirequeen on
Wednesday, 21st June 2006 @ 02:55:39 AM AEST
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| Yes i am a hopeless romantic and i love this piece.great job |
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Re: LoveQuest
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by Lo2681 on
Wednesday, 21st June 2006 @ 07:04:37 PM AEST
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I am a hopeless romantic I am affraid so I really liked this piece. "The heart is always searching" this is so true. It never stops. Even when we are in a relationship we are searching for exceptance and love within it.
~Lo |
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Re: LoveQuest
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 2nd July 2006 @ 07:33:46 PM AEST
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ah ... spoken like a true poet!!
Spike, I have to say I love the way you wrote this. But,
there is somewhat of a very melancholy tone to the
whole darn thing. Being that I AM a hopeless romantic,
[actually president of the club], I fear that your word
choices ... and certain phrases in here are somewhat
disquieting where love is concerned.
I would add just one thing to your last line .. the heart
is always hoping as well.. hoping that it's search
will finally end in the arms of its one true love.
Now THAT is an honest HR statement!! (how bold am I? lol)
*hugs*
~Breezy |
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Re: LoveQuest
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Tuesday, 4th July 2006 @ 02:55:52 AM AEST
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Spike~
I, myself am a hopeless romantic and yes the heart is always searching for love and acceptance. I wished more people read ur work. You are a true artist in poetic verse.
Wishing you the best always Spike~
warm hugs,
~*sue m*~ |
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Re: LoveQuest
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by Silent-No-More on
Sunday, 9th July 2006 @ 06:31:43 AM AEST
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Welp... add me to the list of those that liken themselves to the description within your author's note. You might as well have just put my name there, LOL... every bit of it is me, I confess.
I particularly like the first stanza here. Frail, yes... one's heart is unfathomably frail, I think. I don't think we realize to what extent it truly is until we do find love. True love somehow manages to bring ever increasing strength and undeniable, unavoidable vulnerability at the same time. There is no amount of 'preparation', foreknowledge, or mental/emotional "armour" that could ever fully protect against that vulnerability... nor, in my humble opinion, should there be. Ah, yes... falling in love... *sigh sigh sigh*... I just cannot imagine that anything ever would have greater affect on a person that having found that one, true.... someone.
Oh and... like Roxie, I might offer a suggestion regarding the last line. I, myself, want to see searching replaced with wishing there... it seems to me to want to be there (to fit, I mean) and truly, I cannot help but consider that hopeless romantics of the haven't-yet-found-it-or-lived-it variety are always, always wishing (whether or not they are "actively searching", so to speak). Just my two cents (*wink*).
Always pleased to have stopped by your page,
~Snemmy
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Re: LoveQuest
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by Keilantra on
Monday, 10th July 2006 @ 12:08:56 PM AEST
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Too soon the poet writes,
The muse in no disposition
Words that could swoon many
Fall flat in composition
Nice. i liked that the best
~kei |
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