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Out of the Mists
Contributed by
NoSaint
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Wednesday, 5th July 2006 @ 08:42:22 AM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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From out of the mists She comes Ravishing enough To strike a man numb
A dress blood red Poured over porcelain skin Curves cause fire Deep within him
Hair of black Over shoulders falls Eyes of green He would give his all
For just a moment To feel her touch But in a second He has given too much
Lost is his soul Just a body exists For her beauty He could not resist
Back to the mists She glides home Leaving the man lost To eternity roam
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2006-07-05 08:42:22] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Out of the Mists
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 5th July 2006 @ 09:22:30 AM AEST (User
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Sums up all the woman I've ever been with!
(well one or two)
I suppose deep down I'm a romantic and it can be overbearing and annoying to the opposite sex!
reminds me poetically of the hurt of longing...
Great work.
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Re: Out of the Mists
(User Rating: 1 ) by poet_in_waiting on
Wednesday, 5th July 2006 @ 09:54:57 AM AEST (User
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that is the dream i had just last night .. don't tell my wife !!
simple language creating vivid pictures .. wtg !!
cheers
sean |
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Re: Out of the Mists
(User Rating: 1 ) by FRANCO on
Wednesday, 5th July 2006 @ 12:28:02 PM AEST (User
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A good expressive poem; the pulse of the emotion could be felt between the lines. The poet’s Comparative Language is Outstanding.
FRANCO
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Re: Out of the Mists
(User Rating: 1 ) by ultimitloozer on
Thursday, 6th July 2006 @ 01:34:38 AM AEST (User
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Dude! I know her!!!
Descriptive with good imagery. Something seems odd with the meter to me, but I'm more into prose, so meter is not normally my thing anyway.
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