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Typical and Unoriginal
Contributed by
jyssvw
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Wednesday, 5th July 2006 @ 05:26:42 PM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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The oath taken should not be trivialized, put aside, or ignored
Its content symbolized more then the faith situated in its place
However, broken, it becomes nothing, by which all is composed
By this, all is shown, to bare no significance, no importance
Scrutinized, held under the hot lamp, the magnifying glass,
Without it, the truth is delayed
There are no people good enough to trust
There is no safe haven of unconditional love
There is no happiness while this cloud of dust, hangs over head
and rains out its poisonous musk
Help is needed in the most desperate of circumstance
In the most crucial of typical times
At the precise moment of impact
The tendency to overlap
Chasing a tail
Into circles of pitch black
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Copyright ©
jyssvw
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2006-07-05 17:26:42]
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Re: Typical and Unoriginal
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by wizard on
Wednesday, 5th July 2006 @ 06:49:46 PM AEST
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awesome write...i love the title, too. i love that opening line!
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Re: Typical and Unoriginal
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by brew on
Wednesday, 5th July 2006 @ 08:30:08 PM AEST
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Strong write, and the last stanza.....well.says it all.! I dont know what exactly , I can type to help, yet, I think.....YOU know.! Yes the write in a whole was exceptional. You always write, close to the inner,.!
Thanks, for sharing......Loved it,
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Re: Typical and Unoriginal
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by lillyjane on
Thursday, 6th July 2006 @ 02:57:52 AM AEST
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| I agree with every thing said, beautiful. xx |
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Re: Typical and Unoriginal
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by Man_On_High on
Saturday, 8th July 2006 @ 10:09:12 PM AEST
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Man.. ((jyss!!))
I echo the sentiments of my counterpart wiz, on the title especialy -
..but my big "O" came in the final stanza..
(no intended pun there.. lol)
rolling along.. brilliant~
Honestly..this is not a 5, but a 5 hundred
it's relative to everything I've ever known and been-
Your true #1 fan..
B.
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