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Undeserving
Contributed by
jyssvw22
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Wednesday, 5th July 2006 @ 05:55:50 PM in AEST
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If gifts are given to those souls which are pure
then a poor man I must always be
If splendor is afforded to those hearts which are free
then a heartless lover I shall be
If paradise is offered to those earning a place on its shores
then my beaches become deserts with no trees
If peace is granted to those minds with no bad thoughts
then thinking will bring me to my knees
If forgiveness is extended to those sincere and warm
then redemption is fleeting rapidly
If forever is a curse to those seeing too many days
then let tomorrow take me
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Re: Undeserving
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by wizard on
Wednesday, 5th July 2006 @ 06:45:30 PM AEST
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nice write, jyss, although short and to the point, it has quite a bit of depth to it...nice job
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Re: Undeserving
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by brew on
Wednesday, 5th July 2006 @ 08:24:10 PM AEST
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Hmmm, seems the heart is taken with this wirte.! "if" that is the key..but if, should or could......would we ever know the answer?!?! Take the chance no matter......"if" its suppose to be right, then "it" will be.! Deep write.
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Re: Undeserving
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by Keilantra on
Friday, 7th July 2006 @ 10:39:04 PM AEST
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i very much enjoyed this write, and im looking forward ot reading more of your thoughts. Kepp it up.
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Re: Undeserving
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 21st August 2006 @ 07:34:55 PM AEST
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What a title! And the lines that follow .. damn, incredible!
For me .. I believe we are all both!! Deserving and
undeserving .. for many reasons
Stirring write .. both mind and heart. You have me
questioning my own worth, just now..
~Breezy
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Re: Undeserving
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by hauntedscorp on
Friday, 7th November 2014 @ 01:46:59 PM AEST
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A crippling paradox of thoughts...Superb.
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