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I'm still waiting to hear ''jump''. I'll know from how high.
Contributed by
drtylilsecret
on
Tuesday, 18th July 2006 @ 10:32:29 AM in AEST
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Wrap your arms around my waist,
Just as I'm about to jump
Grab my hand
Before hell does,
And let me fall into your arms
Know my secrets
Tell me yours
Break and enter in my mind,
I promise charges won't be pressed
But you'll confess
I'll charge a price
For every door you open wide
Just so sick of going home,
Knowing that i'm still alone..
I'll call you air
As i'm drowning slowly,
Because air is what i lack
You must be sight,
Since i'm going blind
You'd be my light,
But no one ever turned you on,
So I'm left to find myself in the dark..
Searching through blurred eyes,
A shelter to hide in,
The right cave,
But then i realize without you in it,
Is another foot into my grave
Don't wait for me to shatter,
Catch me when I'm about to break
Know my secrets...
Tell me yours....
Kiss my soul
And warm my heart,
Be the lifeguard that saved me,
Wrapped all nice,
Be my present,
Under the dying christmas tree
Just so sick of going home...
Knowing that i'm still alone...
A star upon a fatal night,
Shine only for my desperate eyes,
Flash of red,
In a sea of black
Answer, please, my fading cries
I'll call you air,
As I"m drowning slowly,
Because air is what i lack
Keep me close
don't let me go,
For you don't know how far I'll stray,
Keep me close
don't let me go,
Or I might not live another day...
Just so sick of going home
Knowing that i'm still alone...
Steal the password to my thoughts,
I'll leave it out for you to see,
Read them all
Help me live
It's up to you, not me.
Don't wait for me to shatter,
Catch me when you know i'll break
Don't close your eyes,
See my scars,
Yeah, they don't blend in,
But no more makeup
You're more natural,
Only you'll smooth out my skin.
Burnt out stars,
They fall in ashes,
Don't let me become one of them...
It's too late, you say?
i know..
Damned to hell i am.
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drtylilsecret
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Re: I'm still waiting to hear ''jump''. I'll know from how high.
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by Ruby2sdy on
Tuesday, 18th July 2006 @ 10:36:27 AM AEST
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I liked this one, it was an interesting read, some unusual metaphors, and very unusual ways of phrasing them, you have a style all of your own... good write!
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Re: I'm still waiting to hear ''jump''. I'll know from how high.
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by Lilbabe on
Tuesday, 18th July 2006 @ 03:24:38 PM AEST
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wow...that would be a really good song! love the way you wrote it.
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Re: I'm still waiting to hear ''jump''. I'll know from how high.
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 3rd August 2006 @ 12:56:18 PM AEST
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hey, haven't heard from you in awhile.
LOVED IT! absolutely amazing...just beautiful. you're an amazing writer, and probably always have been, and will be. awesome..
- Bethani - |
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Re: I'm still waiting to hear ''jump''. I'll know from how high.
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by lillyjane on
Monday, 21st August 2006 @ 03:18:07 AM AEST
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| I agree with everything said, brilliant. xxx |
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Re: I'm still waiting to hear ''jump''. I'll know from how high.
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by holderofthestone on
Saturday, 9th September 2006 @ 04:02:46 PM AEST
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| nice. i liked this alot. i love how it flows. awesome poem. A++++ |
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Re: I'm still waiting to hear ''jump''. I'll know from how high.
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by Spike on
Saturday, 23rd September 2006 @ 03:33:14 AM AEST
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Definitely needs to be in a category for "dark love" poetry. Its a painfully emotional read, in its honesty and intent. I'm sure it will sound fantastic wrapped around a killer bass line and a fervent drum solo!
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Re: I'm still waiting to hear ''jump''. I'll know from how high.
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by tearstained_soul on
Thursday, 16th November 2006 @ 02:17:22 AM AEST
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" A star upon a fatal night,
Shine only for my desperate eyes,
Flash of red,
In a sea of black
Answer, please, my fading cries "
that's the eepest stanza, i tihnk. but the whole poem flows perfectly together. and i know you dont need to hear it from me, because plenty of other people have told you (in different words of course) but you are an AWESOME writer (suprised?) lol
britttney*
5 stars hun! (and this time i wont forget to vote like i did last time!)
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