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Black Resolve
Contributed by
Man_On_High
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Tuesday, 18th July 2006 @ 10:19:33 PM in AEST
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You are gone far beyond any amber dream
to help push up demented daisies.. lol
please count your bellyful of bruised blessings
in some other fool-forsaken furrow of sky.
Out the rancorous outskirts you came
on a high wind of bombast
to teach us your poetical manners:
some 'surly surgeon with quaky scalpel'
slicing through us all with parsimonious paeans..
brushing dust of your felicitous vocabulary
for the ramblings to savor and savage..
resentment of a former love perhaps;
her face flaming under Black..
striding with shoes untied through singing streets
for freedom condemned by the color of you
in some lost city that never called you daughter.
Many has been the brash young bard.. wilted
under the salty slash of your tongue..
scowling and growling in your cup-
you pulverise the "whelping young pups"
..who might lick your uncomprimising boots-
and you fall into daydreams
on the world-wide poetical network.
Were you ever magnanimous in spirit?
(in a fleeting moment only)
..and only as quick were all your gleaming glorious shadows..
now gone and long forgotten
glittering into your stuttering soul.
Even a rare day would find
suffering fools putting in faith
half-expecting wisdom to come out-
tramping quietly back to behind your empty cask
of hoarded treasure under that dense degratory sky.
On the contrary though:
I felt the wind of your passing
and that night saw a shooting star
and called it mere coincidence.
your welcome~
Man On High
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Re: Black Resolve
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 19th July 2006 @ 12:17:35 AM AEST
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Quite concise and deep conviction that as always finds it's way into the galery of poetic and artistic perfection. Great write Bill.
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Re: Black Resolve
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by Vampirequeen on
Wednesday, 19th July 2006 @ 06:46:30 AM AEST
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wow amazing Billy
I felt the wind of your passing
and that night saw a shooting star
and called it mere coincidence
love that
hugs |
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Re: Black Resolve
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 19th July 2006 @ 12:10:07 PM AEST
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Unusually strong of conviction here.
Well versed and poetic tounge lashing blended with the softness of herat.
Interesting and diffrent! |
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Re: Black Resolve
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 19th July 2006 @ 02:05:46 PM AEST
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OMG!!!! I think I got that message loud and clear. You did an awesome thing here with this poem! ! ! And the star at the top of the tree that almost had me literally falling out of my chair???? The last two words.....you're welcome.
*grinning and applauding*
Thanks for making my day.
Tim
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Re: Black Resolve
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 19th July 2006 @ 05:52:47 PM AEST
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HasBen used the very word that came to my mind as I scrolled down to comment. Perfection, plain and simple. I relished the verse:
"Many has been the brash young bard.. wilted
under the salty slash of your tongue..
scowling and growling in your cup-
you pulverise the "whelping young pups"
..who might lick your uncomprimising boots-
and you fall into daydreams
on the world-wide poetical network."
I think you might know how I can relate to this poem and this particular verse from some "fretting" of recent days. Same standard of magnificence in this work as in most all of your writes, Billy. Tip o' my hat to ya, bard.
wabl
KenMoore
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Re: Black Resolve
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by shelby on
Wednesday, 19th July 2006 @ 09:34:24 PM AEST
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Woawwww Billy,
I'm blown away in your words. There would be nothing I could say to do it justice, mmm left me speechless almost( that doesnt happen often LOL) I loved it start to finish. It empowered me, cant explain it so I wont.
this deserves a huge hug!
Michelle |
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Re: Black Resolve
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by Leslie on
Wednesday, 19th July 2006 @ 09:34:27 PM AEST
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| This has gotten really ugly and out of hand. Too bad. Black has some valuable points to make but the manner in which he does it is egotistical and sometimes cruel. Constructive criticism is useful, being mean-spirited is not. |
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Re: Black Resolve
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by thepoetryman on
Wednesday, 19th July 2006 @ 10:49:11 PM AEST
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| Some very nice imagery my friend... |
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Re: Black Resolve
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by emystar on
Friday, 21st July 2006 @ 10:13:00 PM AEST
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Wow friend,
You have me laughing.
Very well done here.
Good work as always.
Is this person really gon?.
Every time I read a comment from them weel never mind.
luv, huggs, big smiles,
wild one,
emy
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Re: Black Resolve
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 22nd July 2006 @ 07:12:29 PM AEST
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Well, my dear ... anything at all I could say on the subject
would be slightly moot at this point, no? lol
But wow ... when you have something to say, you really
say it with utmost finesse! I could not have done this
so incredibly .. and that ending? omg .. it put me in
hysterics! literally
Thank you for this. Thank you- thank you- thank you!!!
(yeah, I know ... I'm welcome! lolol)
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Re: Black Resolve
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 24th July 2006 @ 03:36:44 AM AEST
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Now,that was one tremendous write,an absolute stunner.Hey.if this is a poem for a dear friend,I should very much like to savour one of yours written for a foe,
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