|
 Menu
|
|
|
|
|
Social
|
|
|
|
|
If
Contributed by
ho0da
on
Sunday, 23rd July 2006 @ 06:41:45 PM in AEST
Topic:
oops
|
If your heart had a voice
would it echo your mind?
If your mind had a choice
would it let you love blind?
If your eyes had no sight
would they let you see pain?
If it hurts when you fight
why do it again?
If you lost your mentality
would your brain taste defeat?
If your dreams were reality
would your life feel complete?
If you drowned in your sorrow
would your spirit live on?
If you died tomorrow
would the world know you're gone?
Copyright ©
ho0da
... [
2006-07-23 18:41:45]
(Date/Time posted on
site)
Advertisments:
|
|
|
|
|
|
Sorry, comments are no longer allowed for anonymous, please register for a free membership to access this feature and more
|
|
All comments are owned by the poster. Your Poetry
Dot Com is not responsible for the content of any
comment.
That said, if you find an offensive comment, please
contact via the FeedBack Form with details, including poem title
etc.
|
|
|
Re: If
(User Rating: 1 )
by Hannah_Heaven on
Sunday, 23rd July 2006 @ 06:45:21 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
the most simplest complicated poem ive read .. simply set out .. but it makes you think ..
'If your dreams were reality
would your life feel complete?'
i love this line .. because thinking about it .. is that why we have dreams, to make life seem uncompleted because we try to complete it in our dreams .. its so wonderfully thought out that it makes it a much more hidden meaning .. great write han xx |
|
|
Re: If
(User Rating: 1 )
by deadclown on
Sunday, 23rd July 2006 @ 06:55:45 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
| Very well written. Very impressive. I agree with Hannah, it is such a simple poem but the choice of words here does make u think. Clever piece |
|
|
Re: If
(User Rating: 1 )
by Adelle on
Sunday, 23rd July 2006 @ 08:10:36 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
| I ABSOLUTLY LOVED IT! |
|
|
Re: If
(User Rating: 1 )
by xxbreathlessx on
Sunday, 23rd July 2006 @ 08:51:50 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
| wow, this poem defitnetly makes me think. you did a great job involving the reader in your poetry and you ask some very intriguing questions. who knows where the answer lies? great job! |
|
|
Re: If
(User Rating: 1 )
by kttykttywfreckls on
Monday, 24th July 2006 @ 02:18:35 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
| Simple yet well written. Really makes you think. |
|
|
|
· 
Poetry
Community
Members
Areas
Reference
Search
Top
Others
