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Something Poetic
Contributed by
Man_On_High
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Wednesday, 26th July 2006 @ 10:39:34 PM in AEST
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Now the frosty stars have gone
I have watched them one by one
Fading on the shores of dawn.
'Round and full the glorious sun
Walks with level step the spray
Through the vestibule of Day
While the wolves that late did howl
Sink to dens and coverts foul
Gaurded by some demon owl
Who last night with mocking swoon
Throated towards the chilly moon
And with eyes that blankly glared
And on my dire torment stared.
By this coarse and alien state
Is all my essence duely wronged
Finer senses that belonged
To a freedom frayed at fate.
Till happier days coming late
When in moonlight dance should turn
'Neath some palmy silky fern
Or in light with twinkling bands
We follow on with clasped hands
To shores of distant golden sands.
And we may find them where they spring
Never brushed by fairer wing
All the corners we can spy
In a single solitude
Where the dew is never dry
Nor the drone of bees intrude.
The rays of rarest hue be there
Full of rosy wines undrained
Times and banquets ne'er profaned
Canopied by fragrant hair
Pearly portents on the sand
Never touched by another hand
Nor the rainbow ripples' shine
On the ridge of frothy brine.
Oh the songs that sung might be
Had I never left the sea!
Billy - 2006
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Re: Something Poetic
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by emystar on
Wednesday, 26th July 2006 @ 11:45:00 PM AEST
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Good writing friend as always.
Huggs,
emy |
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Re: Something Poetic
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by Vampirequeen on
Thursday, 27th July 2006 @ 02:20:57 AM AEST
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wow Billy i lol just fell in love with this poem hehehe.Beautiful job.
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Re: Something Poetic
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by lillyjane on
Thursday, 27th July 2006 @ 04:50:56 AM AEST
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| Your poem is truly beautiful, it could of come straight out of a poetry book, cant believe some of the talent on here..xxxx |
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Re: Something Poetic
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 27th July 2006 @ 06:57:38 AM AEST
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Beautiful poetry genuine and revealing from the heart. i 'm gonna add this Bill, i hope your getting these coments what with site being down lately a lovely work of love good going
my new england bro.
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Re: Something Poetic
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Thursday, 27th July 2006 @ 08:21:29 PM AEST
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Hey B~
You know what I like so much about your poetry is that it's always varied. It doesn't matter what you write about you always do it with style. You have such a uniqueness to you Billy~ You have the ability to draw ur reader in and leave them captivated in ur poem from start to finish. That says alot about the poet who has such flare with a pen~
A dynamic write dearest Billy~
Take care my dear friend.
love n hugs from ur fan/friend,
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Re: Something Poetic
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by Spike on
Saturday, 29th July 2006 @ 07:04:03 AM AEST
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Ah, Billy, welcome to the pantheon of metaphysical poets! So many pople trip over their wordy attempts to roll out such a rich and high minded piece as this. So many tempered layers, it reads like it's been forged in creative fires rather than just written.
supoib!
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Re: Something Poetic
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 30th July 2006 @ 06:46:12 PM AEST
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What an appropriately titled composition. This definitely is
Something Poetic .. something intensely poetic, in fact!!
The imagery here has a ethereal feel to it - almost as if you
lulled us into a dream. So soft and calm, and romantic. (For me,
it could just be the water references, as you know, I find water to
be a wonderfully superb source of solace.)
What I truly enjoy about this write, (as is true within a goodly portion
of your work, but especially here, methinks), is the way in which you
express a thought .. so that it can be decidedly interpreted in
many ways. A compelling draw to be sure.
Simply put .. this is beautiful, dearest heart.
~Breezy
[hoping you are enjoying the game, you lucky dog!! lol]
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Re: Something Poetic
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by fielding88 on
Monday, 31st July 2006 @ 12:15:13 AM AEST
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| Now, I do believe this is a poem where you've captured the essence of what it means to be poetic. It was a very deep write, and romantic in a way due only to the fact that it was such an emotional write with a lot of attention paid to little details like rhyme and metering. Exceptionally well done. |
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Re: Something Poetic
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by Nazmythian on
Monday, 31st July 2006 @ 10:37:15 PM AEST
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I'll echo Eternal_Dreamer, Spike, and Breezy.
I enjoyed the feel of meter and flow, and the change and shift of rhyme patterns that led me to pay more attention to the words, than when they were actually rhyming. It was a refreshing write with an old world feel. I loved it Billy !!! Well penned.
Nazzy ~ |
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Re: Something Poetic
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by Keilantra on
Tuesday, 1st August 2006 @ 12:20:20 PM AEST
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i really enjoyed this. it had gret word choice and imagery.
xXx
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Re: Something Poetic
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 1st August 2006 @ 06:03:15 PM AEST
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Your work always draws the folks I consider masters on this site to comment with knowing praise. Spike beat me to "layered textures", Suzie Q beat me to variation. But the rhyme so captured with emphasis that variation that created the layered textures with your usual mastery. I loved it! And I'll steal from Breezy too. This piece was definitely "something poetic".
wabl
KenMoore
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