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Dont Laugh at me
Contributed by
rockstarr12747
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Saturday, 29th July 2006 @ 07:35:18 PM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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Dont laugh at me when I cry
Dont smile while you make me frown
Just because you are sad and shy
You shouldnt bring others down
You push me and you shove me
But yet you really can't see
That I could be your friend
That could help you in the end
But yet your still so cruel
To others because your sad
And that makes you a bigger fool
Because others have it twice as bad
Maybe all it is is fear
And maybe you can't say
But if you talk one day
When you think no one can hear
Some one might feel the same
And share their growing pain
Then you might see
That nothing good comes from laughing at me
So when you go to tease
Think of how you would feel
Then ask yourself "how would i heal"
If This happened to me.
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rockstarr12747
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2006-07-29 19:35:18]
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Re: Dont Laugh at me
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by True on
Saturday, 29th July 2006 @ 08:23:07 PM AEST
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| I like the poem, however, I think you should stick to one rhyme scheme, constantly changing the rhyme scheme disrupts the flow of the poem. If you can't change it without losing the meaning of the poem then don't but if you can I would suggest it. |
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