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Denied.
Contributed by
keilantra
on
Sunday, 30th July 2006 @ 10:44:19 PM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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Inside you, I wanted to find
the red stars and the blue moons
that had littered onto the purple sky.
wishing.yearning.craving.
to take them out and make them real.
Beside you, I wanted to have
the comfort of warm hands
but they had slid through me, never
touching.feeling.holding
because they were dead.
Astride you, I wanted to break
your ribs and get to your heart.
Then I could ask it why it didnt
see.want.believe.
in me so I could be alive.
Instead of alone.
Copyright ©
keilantra
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2006-07-30 22:44:19]
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Re: Denied.
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by fielding88 on
Sunday, 30th July 2006 @ 10:48:25 PM AEST
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| Very unique, and introspective. I enjoyed how this was put together and presented. Nice work. |
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Re: Denied.
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by TheLostPuppet on
Monday, 31st July 2006 @ 12:55:05 AM AEST
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I agree with fielding88. It's unique and put together well.
Great write
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Re: Denied.
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by Man_On_High on
Monday, 31st July 2006 @ 10:02:09 PM AEST
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Kei..
great work..
I fear the final stanza..
and only, for the recipient in question.. lol
B |
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Re: Denied.
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by Silent-No-More on
Monday, 7th August 2006 @ 09:55:41 PM AEST
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I just adore your expression, your tone. This is beautiful and heartrending and so utterly poetic that it leaves me smiling (for being a lover of poetry) even though it is, as you put it, a "slightly painful" thought being expressed here.
You, dear poet, have incredible talent and, clearly, a poet's heart and mind. This sort of expression and skill is nothing that can be taught/learned... you were born for this, I believe --- please don't ever stop writing!
(And... I cannot begin to tell you how entirely I believe that the intended has overlooked something [someone] remarkable. It is they that should be pained for having denied such beauty!!)
~Snemmy
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Re: Denied.
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by JockPhillips on
Thursday, 24th August 2006 @ 12:26:01 PM AEST
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| Red stars blue moon and purple sky is good scenery with words. Keep up the strong work for. |
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