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Incomplete
Contributed by
Nazmythian
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Tuesday, 1st August 2006 @ 06:28:50 PM in AEST
Topic:
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I could easily fall towards darkness
Slip silently into despair
I doubt anyone would blame me
But I refuse to go down there
Now I dont have all the answers
And I dont even know the plan
I just know its whats inside of me
That makes me who I am
Indeed, maybe some parts are missing
But they may have yet to be found
Just know the picture isnt perfect
Till that last puzzle piece lays down
Sometimes you may think less of me
For those things you might have seen
Some surface imperfection
Or some flaw you might perceive
Am Im a shadow of what might have been
Within the dreams you held for me
I am no lame horse put to pasture
Not just another mouth to feed
So please, dont dote upon me pity
Dont think any less of me
For I refuse to see myself
As incomplete
~ Nazmythian ~
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Re: Incomplete
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 1st August 2006 @ 06:56:40 PM AEST
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Scotty .. I can't even imagine what you must have gone
through this past month and my heart is anguished
that you've not only had to fight a physical battle, but
a mental one as well. Sometimes I fear, the mental
battle is that much harder, because people don't
actually see the struggle, most times.
Your writing has not suffered, though I see. Incredible
piece, scotty. Truly remarkable.
~Breezy |
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Re: Incomplete
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by fielding88 on
Tuesday, 1st August 2006 @ 08:22:33 PM AEST
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| This came off as inspired. It read like something written with strong will and identity, and it added something extra to this piece. Ignoring the rhyme scheme and excellent flow, it was just really well-written for all the less technical reasons. Great write. |
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Re: Incomplete
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by Vampirequeen on
Wednesday, 2nd August 2006 @ 02:18:08 AM AEST
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| wow amazing |
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Re: Incomplete
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 2nd August 2006 @ 01:51:18 PM AEST
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Never would I think of you sir as incomplete!
Nor would I ever say you have stopped growing!
Bravo!! |
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Re: Incomplete
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by shelby on
Wednesday, 2nd August 2006 @ 02:38:27 PM AEST
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Ok you done went and made me cry darnit!
This is beautiful my friend and I said it before, I admire your strength through and through. Its the hard battle to fight when our mind begins to fight the physical battles also.
Your never incomplete in my eyes my friend I admire you all the more.
Michelle |
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Re: Incomplete
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 2nd August 2006 @ 08:52:19 PM AEST
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| You are quite the man and quite the poet. This poem proves that. |
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Re: Incomplete
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by Willofree on
Thursday, 3rd August 2006 @ 05:04:38 PM AEST
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Naz,
This was an emotional read for me, knowing what you have been through, but pity was not the focus. Rather it was empathy and admiration that I felt. And I am not surprised that you are coping well considering your strength of character and faith.
Well done my friend
I'm proud to be your friend
Will/Terry
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Re: Incomplete
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by Spike on
Monday, 21st August 2006 @ 04:54:17 AM AEST
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Hiya Naz. Nicely done. The second stanza reverbs strongly with me right now. Funny how we contruct ourselves-inside and out, and equally bizarre how we see others. There's a lot of primal impulses tied up with symmetry, vitality and completeness - survivability, procreation, protection, self esteem, identification. We need it less with our technological adapations, but these traits still show through in self image, fashion etc. Just remember -we are great adapters.
Spike |
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Re: Incomplete
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by FleurdeSang on
Tuesday, 28th November 2006 @ 11:47:12 AM AEST
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"What we actually learn, from any given set of circumstances, determines whether we become increasingly powerless or more powerful."
- Blaine Lee
~Fleur
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