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It Dawns on Me
Contributed by
CodyJ
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Sunday, 13th August 2006 @ 06:06:42 PM in AEST
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She comes on strong, much like a dawn done wrong,
abstract skyline, untouchable starlight,
displayed across the heavens like a song
giving hope for those that're lost in life's plight.
I talk with the drive of a man who wants,
wants to feel the touch of his special one.
She receives with candor that openly flaunts
what she has, and I am the only one.
She leaves on the tail of the falling moon,
hands holding fingers too small to be mine.
She fades in the mist of new dawns white gloom,
in the arms of her feminine new find.
So I sing vainly till the morning comes,
for she has the moon, so why love the sun?
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CodyJ
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2006-08-13 18:06:42]
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Re: It Dawns on Me
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by lostinmyself on
Sunday, 13th August 2006 @ 06:16:11 PM AEST
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Wow... I do like this, very much.
I could get lost in the words, they have a sort of...dream-like quality about them... looking in from the outside.
Some of the lines had a bigger impact than others... I love the last two lines so much.
One thing though.. I don't think it's possible for a dawn to be wrong.
Great write,
Phil xxx |
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Re: It Dawns on Me
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by ever1der on
Sunday, 13th August 2006 @ 07:10:34 PM AEST
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This is gorgeous..wish it was mine.
"Dissplayed across the heavens like a song"...wonderful. |
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