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Eternal Dreams
Contributed by
candysears
on
Monday, 28th August 2006 @ 11:55:44 AM in AEST
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spiritual
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In the sleep of eternal dreams
Bring peace..
A garden of beauty awaits,
So Id been told,
My safe haven..
When I awaken inside the
Golden gate
No more tears, no more
Pain
Cries of sorrow cease to
Swept through the land
No more shrouds of
Darkens damp cold soil
To beckon for my mortal
Body,
The churning seas will know
Longer seek me out in vain,
The destiny of my soul will
Ride upon the rainbow
Amid the city of heaven
Where angels sing
Celebrating the rebirth of
My soul..
Copyright ©
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2006-08-28 11:55:44]
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Re: Eternal Dreams
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by amaya_h_k on
Monday, 28th August 2006 @ 12:53:01 PM AEST
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| this is a very good poem, I really enjoyed it. There are a few errors in it though. Other than that it was wonderful. |
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Re: Eternal Dreams
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by twbanter on
Monday, 28th August 2006 @ 04:27:19 PM AEST
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Why not put "will" in front of ride? Just curious. Nice write...
The churning Seas will Know
and seek me out in vain
The destiny of my soul
will ride (upon) a rainbow
Upon is optional here, I wouldn't include it myself.
Hope you're not ofended, I wish for help as well... (God knows I need it!)
Good concept...
Tom W |
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Re: Eternal Dreams
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by Man_On_High on
Monday, 28th August 2006 @ 06:27:55 PM AEST
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Lovely my friend~
paradise awaits you.. though I hope you don't plan
on leaving anytime soon~
B
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Re: Eternal Dreams
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 28th August 2006 @ 06:59:46 PM AEST
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"Celebrating the rebirth of
My soul.."
candy, that last bit is so amazingly inspiring!!
This was such a beautiful write. Very peaceful
and serene. Almost dreamlike ..
~Breezy |
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Re: Eternal Dreams
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by Jeff_Scott_Morehead on
Saturday, 2nd September 2006 @ 09:44:09 AM AEST
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Freat write...enjoyable read.
Jeff |
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Re: Eternal Dreams
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by unknown_utopia on
Friday, 18th May 2007 @ 10:38:00 AM AEST
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I wanna ride upon a rainbow
good flow |
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