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The Old Window Sill
Contributed by
doug
on
Sunday, 3rd September 2006 @ 09:56:11 PM in AEST
Topic:
psychoticpoems
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Type , type, typing
a single singing nightingale
my old lovely window plays
a gorgeous nature show
my happy smile smiling
your breath's sweet old window sill
my little swing is sleeping still
out in the gentle cold
type , type , type the words
singing , singing little bird
little bird..
why are'nt you singing?
little swing
why are you swinging?
just the wind
thats all I'm seeing
of course thats all I see
type , type , typing away
these words will never do
the old window tilts
and plays a silent show
night air
your breath has grown foul
WHATS STARING PAST MY WINDOW SILL!!!!!!!!!
TAP , TAP , CRACK , TEETH , BLOOD ,
SCREAM , BLOOD!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
LITTLE BIRD!!!
CAN'T YOU HEAR ME SCREAMING?!!
CAN'T YOU SEE MY FEET A' SWINGING!!!
FROM THE TREE AS I AM SCREAMING?!!!
AND SWINGING , AND SWiNGing
and swi..................
Copyright ©
doug
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2006-09-03 21:56:11]
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Re: The Old Window Sill
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by emystar on
Sunday, 3rd September 2006 @ 10:11:13 PM AEST
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Very nice, rythmic write.
I can heart the beat.
luv it.
huggs,
emy |
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Re: The Old Window Sill
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by True on
Sunday, 3rd September 2006 @ 10:52:26 PM AEST
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| This has a demented Poe type of feeling to it, I'm not sure if that's what you were going for but that's whatI got from it, especially at the end. |
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Re: The Old Window Sill
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by ever1der on
Sunday, 3rd September 2006 @ 11:49:48 PM AEST
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| I agree with the Poe type feel..I hate it. lol |
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Re: The Old Window Sill
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by secretwind on
Monday, 4th September 2006 @ 12:14:01 AM AEST
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| Interesting flow... |
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Re: The Old Window Sill
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 4th September 2006 @ 07:24:40 PM AEST
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well .. holy heck, doug!! lol
I see my eagerness to direct you in the way of Poe was for naught ..
as you already seemed to have been touched by his grace. lol
I thought the previous one, (Haunted Bell) might have been
influenced by him, and now I see I was right. most excellent
Definitely bordering on the psychotic, my friend. Almost
creepy in a way. Well done to evoke the sensation of
cold fingers gently sliding down one's spine ...
[I had to check all my windows after this .. ]
~Breezy |
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Re: The Old Window Sill
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by vampirequeen35 on
Tuesday, 5th September 2006 @ 01:23:36 AM AEST
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holy cow
I agree with Breezy with this one.
i am impress |
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