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Die A Moment
Contributed by
Uncertain_Oblivion
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Friday, 8th September 2006 @ 01:59:46 PM in AEST
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Some more drink and a backhand smack,
I'm down on my knees.
Going away into myself...I hide.
I'm left with jagged edges inside
so I cut myself deep within
just to bleed the wounds
left by the words you lay on me.
You take me from myself
and place yourself within my boundaries...
Uninvited.
I ask for nothing
and you keep giving- pain.
Struggling to get away from you,
I choke and strive to breathe,
you allow air
so you can choke me once more.
I struggle and I watch it excite you.
Still I hide,
and still you're uninvited.
Smothering inside, I feel your hands caressing me.
Looking at you, I see that sick twisted smile
and I know what's next,
Your excitement is my disgust for you.
Shooting your seed onto me
I forget who I am...and die a moment.
Your hate is disguised as love,
and your love is felt with some more drink
and a backhand smack.
~Rhiannon
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Re: Die A Moment
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by StormyNites on
Friday, 8th September 2006 @ 03:58:55 PM AEST
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| Rhiannon..I'm just in tears reading this..I so hope you have got away from your tragic circumstances. Please remember NO ONE can take your soul. If you ever need to talk please pm anytime. Its a very good poem and I hope through your words you find the strength to move forward. |
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Re: Die A Moment
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by BobbyZimmerman on
Friday, 8th September 2006 @ 07:08:22 PM AEST
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| Absolutely incredible. What a brilliant piece of writing...."You allow air, so you can choke me once more." I found that to be the most powerful line. Just a fantastic post. |
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Re: Die A Moment
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by emystar on
Friday, 8th September 2006 @ 11:06:54 PM AEST
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This is so sad but you've manged to capture your emotions etc. very well.
luv, huggs
emy |
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Re: Die A Moment
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by deadheadpoet on
Wednesday, 20th September 2006 @ 02:12:46 PM AEST
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Okay....this one left me angry and tearful. If this is you then I hope that you are away from this now. My evil was my first husband, horrible bastard. I could feel his filthy, foul smelling hands on my neck, when I read this. You have a way of pulling emotions right out of the core. Fantastic write....tragic story.
I wish you peace,
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Re: Die A Moment
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by darkangeleyes57 on
Thursday, 19th October 2006 @ 12:08:57 PM AEST
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This was really... wow.. I can relate to this somewhat... I really thought this was amazing.. I like reading your poems.. You have a lot of talent.. You have a great way with words... and expressing them..
Take care
Christina |
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