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Lost
Contributed by
hermoiii
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Wednesday, 13th September 2006 @ 12:43:07 PM in AEST
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Lifepoems
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Portraits of tomorrow are blurry
I'm lost in the winds of fist and fury
I tried to see everything with my eyes
Unfortunately all i see are lies
I tried to tell them what i want
They never tried to listen
Or they'd rather not hear
Well this is my future i tell
Everything just passed by
No sound was heard
But I shouted my dreams
I painted them in red
They never looked at it
Or they'd rather not see
Take a look! This is me!
They cannot see it!
For them it's trash
They just wanted to see
What their eyes perceive
Look deeper look further
This is me! This is me!
They just won't listen!
They cannot see!
My God they're blind!
Please help them find me
Dear Lord oh please!
Please help me find me
Im lost! Im lost!
They never listened to me
They never saw what's about me
They lost me
I lost me....
Copyright ©
hermoiii
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2006-09-13 12:43:07]
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Re: Lost
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by OceanZ on
Wednesday, 13th September 2006 @ 12:53:31 PM AEST
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you know what?
when i'm feeling lost, i simply gaze into my sealing (as i do quite alot) and i think of what i did, and what is it what i wanna do...
and then,, in order to refresh my thoughts i day dream :)
Nice poem ;) |
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Re: Lost
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by TwistedCage on
Wednesday, 13th September 2006 @ 01:09:54 PM AEST
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I feel a sense of desperation in this one, which really adds to the effect. I found it a bit choppy, but that is often how our emotions are, and I thought this added to the peices character as well.
Overall, I thought it was well written, and quite the grabber.
Nicely done, |
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Re: Lost
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by shelby on
Wednesday, 13th September 2006 @ 01:47:17 PM AEST
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Such an emotional write. Strong and loaded with power you brought the reader into this write.
As far as the feelings of being confused and lost, it comes and goes in different stages of your life that is the uncomfortable part of being human. I have gone through this for several months now once again. It will pass and doors will open and you will find your way. SOmetimes when these feelings emerge we fight with them instead of flow like the river, once we learn to flow with the river be as water it becomes clear.
Hang in there your strong I can sense it!
Michelle |
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Re: Lost
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by richcol7522 on
Wednesday, 13th September 2006 @ 05:31:24 PM AEST
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I feel what you are going through. Ive known this all too well. There was alot of feeling in this. You did a very good job in writting this. Take care and I hope that you find your way back. PRAY__
Rich
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Re: Lost
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by BobbyZimmerman on
Wednesday, 13th September 2006 @ 06:04:32 PM AEST
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| Very powerful, we have all struggled at one point or another over who and what we were. Nice write. |
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