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Unconditional Love
Contributed by
oneir8dude
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Thursday, 21st September 2006 @ 11:10:27 PM in AEST
Topic:
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A boy and his dog went exploring in the wood
Had the feeling of splendor and all things good
Throwing sticks and kicking rocks
Splashing mud puddles and taking walks
Both did this each and everyday
The boy and his friend loved to play
That day they ran and went up the trail
The ending joy was about to avail
The boy went running in another direction
His dogs ears perked up as if to listen
For impending doom for his young friend
For the path he was on was about to end
The trusty friend ran after, but it was to late
The ground gave way due to his weight
The young man fell down a ravine
His fate that day could not be foreseen
His friend ran to the edge and looked down
It seemed that time had slowed down
The young man was not moving
His friends canine heart was breaking
He could not reach him
He could not save him
After time past without his mate
He felt lost and had to wait
His friend never came, over the years
The dog waited by the ravine with tears
Waiting for his friend to return
His company, the dog would yearn
As the years past and the toll time took
The dog sat at the ravine and down he would look
For his friend he missed so badly
Looking for him waiting so sadly
His friend still waits to this very day
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oneir8dude
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Re: Unconditional Love
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by sadaddy on
Thursday, 21st September 2006 @ 11:29:10 PM AEST
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Well done, but sad.
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Re: Unconditional Love
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by brokenwings on
Friday, 22nd September 2006 @ 12:00:04 AM AEST
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awww this was very sad and very well written.. i loved it..
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Re: Unconditional Love
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by jerseysue on
Friday, 22nd September 2006 @ 02:22:05 AM AEST
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| Sad story, but also teaches us how faithful a pet can be. Human frienship can also be like this, true devotion. Lovely, but sad read. Thank you for sharing. Sue x |
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Re: Unconditional Love
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by shelby on
Friday, 22nd September 2006 @ 11:20:44 AM AEST
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As humans we can take a daily lesson of learning from our pets, our dogs have so many qualities we could only hope to gain and live out in life.
THis was incredible and brought a tear to my eye. Your poem unfolded perfectly it was like I was there. Nicely done my friend.
~Michelle~ |
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Re: Unconditional Love
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by deadheadpoet on
Friday, 22nd September 2006 @ 12:05:58 PM AEST
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Bill, This was so damn sad....couldn't leave a comment on it last night....too torn up. What a heart-wrenching story.
Peace, Laura |
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Re: Unconditional Love
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by StormyNites on
Friday, 22nd September 2006 @ 01:26:53 PM AEST
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| excellent poem..you have a gift. |
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Re: Unconditional Love
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by ever1der on
Friday, 22nd September 2006 @ 01:50:02 PM AEST
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| I hate this write lol. it's too sad...I kept hoping for a happy ending. |
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Re: Unconditional Love
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by Skillz on
Saturday, 23rd September 2006 @ 02:07:05 AM AEST
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| oh how very sad and vivid.!! |
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Re: Unconditional Love
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by Vampirequeen on
Saturday, 23rd September 2006 @ 04:50:53 AM AEST
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| awww so sad it brought tears to my eyes. |
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Re: Unconditional Love
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by Silent-No-More on
Saturday, 23rd September 2006 @ 12:15:25 PM AEST
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I can't believe no one has yet mentioned that picture! It's absolutely adorable and in black white - divine! There's just sooo much in it... innocence, connectedness, loyalty, and yes! unconditional love. What a wonderful accompaniment to your words!
This piece will tug at the heart of any animal lover, I suspect. Gosh, and those that remember a beloved pup from their childhood will ache a bit for having had to let go at some point - at least I know I did.
~Snem
(who was also secretly wishing for a happy ending *sigh* but found that it was probably moving for the lack of one) |
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Re: Unconditional Love
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 24th September 2006 @ 02:10:00 PM AEST
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Ah man, this was sad ... but damn good! Great storytellin'. Perfect photo accompaniment. Yup. I like your style. Be back fer more! Good work.
wabl
KenMoore
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Re: Unconditional Love
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Monday, 25th September 2006 @ 08:06:10 PM AEST
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An amazing, but rather sad write you have here. It brought a tear to my eye. It goes with a saying,"That dog is man's best friend." I totally agree with that.
The picture tops off a powerful and very well written poem. Keep up the magical work.
Hugs n prayers,
Sue M |
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by AnastasiaN on
Tuesday, 26th September 2006 @ 03:27:06 PM AEST
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| so emotional for me and i bet it was for you to write it. the picture is beautiful. you expressed the dog's sorrow well and i hope everyone finds their peace. |
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Re: Unconditional Love
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by Ruby2sdy on
Thursday, 28th September 2006 @ 11:28:07 AM AEST
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awww, so sad; reminds me of an old scottish tale, about greyfriars bobby (they made it into a film) this little scottie dog waited for years at the grave of his long dead master, as he was so faithful. So sad,
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