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a piece of me
Contributed by
LadyDama
on
Friday, 14th February 2003 @ 04:00:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
StoryPoetry
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i was once a young woman, fifteen
inside of my head i could scream
nothing seemed quite right
my soul filled with fright
and then i turned sixteen
clubbing came natural to me
writing poems helped me be free
no food on the table
even though mother was able
that's when i decided to flee
seventeen brought the "love of my life"
he used me and filled me with strife
left out in the cold
teenagers are bold
my heart was bled with a knife
"adulthood" came at eighteen
drugs were galore at the scene
pass out when i'm able
hang my neck with a cable
serve my country, if that's what you mean
nineteen brought me more trouble
writing faded away like a bubble
grew up, got a house
learned to live like a mouse
i became a slave on the double
fast forward to this image of me
eight years of no writing to see
something clicked in the abyss
no more hit and miss
once again i live to be free
to be continued...
Copyright ©
LadyDama
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2003-02-14 16:00:00]
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Re: a piece of me
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by Maha on
Friday, 14th February 2003 @ 04:27:22 PM AEST
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| This is so sad but well written. It expresses true feelings. I enjoyed reading it. Thanks.God bless you! |
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Re: a piece of me
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by MoonlitAngel on
Friday, 14th February 2003 @ 04:45:17 PM AEST
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I really really like this! I look forward to part 2!
~ Moonlit Angel |
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Re: a piece of me
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by TheSpiritx on
Wednesday, 19th February 2003 @ 05:07:40 AM AEST
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| Excellent rhyming scheme and clear plot. Your words and imagery help to relate to your story. I know some of the pain the subject went through. Nice work. |
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