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FREE FALL
Contributed by
Forgotten_soul
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Sunday, 1st October 2006 @ 04:30:18 PM in AEST
Topic:
psychoticpoems
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Blood surging through your veins
Adrenaline pumping
A sharp breath
Looking down
You stand at the edge
Staring down into oblivion
Calling to you
Leaning forward
Lurching into a free fall
The world around you collapses
As gravity pulls at you
Falling onto dream
But its all real
With the end coming closer
seconds ticking away
Your life flashes before your eyes
And then a surge of pain
Time stops
you've reached the beginning
Looking down
Over the edge.
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Forgotten_soul
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2006-10-01 16:30:18]
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Re: FREE FALL
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by deadheadpoet on
Sunday, 1st October 2006 @ 05:59:57 PM AEST
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Good write. The words hit hard....the write making me nauseous just thinking about being way up high and standing on the edge looking down. Good but scary visual. Thanks for sharing.
Peace, Laura |
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Re: FREE FALL
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by BobbyZimmerman on
Monday, 2nd October 2006 @ 05:39:02 PM AEST
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| Good write, I especially liked the description, keep it up! |
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Re: FREE FALL
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by secretwind on
Wednesday, 4th October 2006 @ 08:00:51 PM AEST
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vivid flow
well done |
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