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I picked a daisy from the path
Contributed by
goodandevil
on
Monday, 2nd October 2006 @ 10:49:23 PM in AEST
Topic:
FriendshipPoetry
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I picked a daisy from the path
To bring to you my friend
I tucked it softly in my pocket
To save it from the rain
Along the path there was a puddle
Into which I stepped and tumbled
I pulled myself up and grumbled
My little daisy had been crumbled
I watched the other daisies choking
Flooded by the rain and soaking
passing them by I kept on limping
Reaching your steps cold and dripping
Id made it through the muddy shower
to have you yell about the hour
looking at me and than my flower
you shut the door to let me flounder
My life spent in the diving queue
I trudged back home and buried you
under the earth, the grass, the dew
the secrets shared now only I knew
You lost a friend that stormy day
one who brought a daisy
You refused to see the gift I brought
with it dark and rainy
You searched for daisies you never found
you left me there I almost drowned
visiting my flowers plot I found
a garden of daisies all around
I had a friend that was a daisy
I buried in the moistened dirt
Through all my travels on this journey
from you I took my only comfort
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goodandevil
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2006-10-02 22:49:23]
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Re: I picked a daisy from the path
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 2nd October 2006 @ 11:01:53 PM AEST
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well done it made me laugh with the falling in the puddle part lol
this poem is a one of a kind
well written and thought out
keep on writing i will be reading |
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Re: I picked a daisy from the path
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by shelby on
Tuesday, 3rd October 2006 @ 11:25:11 AM AEST
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I had many emotions reading this poem.
Yes I smiled at the slipping in the puddle also. The depth of this amazed me. A lesson within the beautiful flowing lines as well. In my minds eyes I could see the beautiful patch of daisies growing from the little one you buried. Simply lovely!
~MIchelle~ |
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Re: I picked a daisy from the path
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by ever1der on
Tuesday, 3rd October 2006 @ 11:26:53 AM AEST
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| awwwwwww poor little daisy..(smiles) good job..the rhyme and all. well done. |
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Re: I picked a daisy from the path
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Tuesday, 3rd October 2006 @ 07:43:59 PM AEST
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Wow you take us on a journey into your life on a particular day in your past and you capture it so well. My God you have penned this so well. The emotions I felt throughout reading your excellent post were so mixed. You have done an excellent job with this write. Well done~
warm smiles n hugs,
Sue M
PS I would also like to thank u for ur kind comment on my poem. I appreciate it deeply :-) |
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