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and on a more positive note
Contributed by
Jyssvw
on
Thursday, 5th October 2006 @ 06:58:56 PM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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Scared of my own shadow
Sifting through old trash
Separating the classics-
from the masters
in chronological order
arranged in separate pairs
I sit and I stare
drummed down was the tempo
dumbed down were the I dont knows
a bums thumb found
with free coffee and warm clothes
three socks and three frozen toes
two clocks-
but nowhere to go
a compact
carry all
many more
days of
drugs and
filthy whores
money for
wishes
and keys to locked doors
sit and stare
nothing is there
so just sit and stare
try to compare
to privileged despair
to heightened awareness
to sensitive bleakness
its not fair
to just sit and stare
Stupid me
Stupid you
Wasted time
Dammed fools
Do tell tales
Of happy foods
Healthy moods
The feeling which looms
In the darkness of the room
In the pitch black of the moon
A reflection of heaven is exhumed
sit and stare
into nothing too soon
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Copyright ©
Jyssvw
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2006-10-05 18:58:56]
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Re: and on a more positive note
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by emystar on
Thursday, 5th October 2006 @ 11:18:38 PM AEST
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Woo u said a mouthfull here.
Very well done.
huggs, smiles,
emy |
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Re: and on a more positive note
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by jerseysue on
Friday, 6th October 2006 @ 01:47:11 AM AEST
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| You certainly poured a multitude of thoughts into this piece. It echoes of sadness, despair and false hope, well I think, or have I got it wrong. Nevertheless it certainly captured my full attention. Well done on a marvelous write. Sue x |
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Re: and on a more positive note
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 6th October 2006 @ 11:41:29 AM AEST
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Wow... this is meaningful.
I loved the tone of it... very emoitional. |
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Re: and on a more positive note
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by Sproglet on
Friday, 6th October 2006 @ 12:13:41 PM AEST
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Wow, wow and WOW
Totally giving you a 5 |
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Re: and on a more positive note
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by brew on
Monday, 9th October 2006 @ 08:16:05 PM AEST
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Throwing it all in to ONE.Eh? With such emotion......You ok?! Sounds like me , lately>! All the fun, and raw emotions, that ..are just there. Goos write tho. Just know , it goes the way it should........
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Re: and on a more positive note
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by Man_On_High on
Saturday, 25th November 2006 @ 02:12:28 AM AEST
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JYSS!
you have returned to form with grandure display my friend~
..the metre and tempo of every line.. foremost~
albeit: 'the jyss I've known and loved these many months before-
..and what a terrific metaphoric display as well..
I LOVE YOUR WORK.. exquisite parables my friend!!
2nd to last couplet: "I am stunned!"
..a return to fantasy-
never stray from truth or from that, which binds you~
B |
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