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slayer of false hope
Contributed by
true
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Tuesday, 10th October 2006 @ 02:07:00 PM in AEST
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And now he lay dead at my feet
a river of blood poured from his heart
he would never hurt me again
his death was a blessing
not just to me
but to everyone
so many had died for him
so many had died for nothing
he was but shadow and air
flitting aross our fantasies
bringing us hope
false hope
I nearly died because of him
but he died because of me
I pierced his heart
his cursed heart
and now he lay dead at my feet
I cried
for though he brought me nothing but pain
without him I could never be happy again
bloody and battered
cupid's corpse lay at my feet
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Re: slayer of false hope
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by shelby on
Tuesday, 10th October 2006 @ 02:29:25 PM AEST
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Dark and chilling write. The ending really got me! What a twist I love it.
~Michelle~ |
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Re: slayer of false hope
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by PhantomVampyress on
Tuesday, 10th October 2006 @ 02:43:33 PM AEST
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wow very powerful write.. i enjoyed this .. it would be a great song .. you can feel the pain in this.. i love it
JENNI |
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Re: slayer of false hope
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by doug on
Tuesday, 10th October 2006 @ 08:50:32 PM AEST
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I enjoyed it very much. I have never seen
another poem based on the concept of
cupids demise. Quite original.
Welcome back , Truly , Doug |
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Re: slayer of false hope
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by lord_sogi on
Monday, 16th April 2007 @ 11:46:08 AM AEST
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| *hides my wings* ummmmm what? I am not hiding anything...lol nice poem, and well written, and nice twist. I think you have a thing for killing cupids...which makes me wonder.... hahaha anyways, if you left out the last line, it could actually describe a lot of relationships, where someone gives their all for someone and they get betrayed and killed themselves (so many had died for him). But I guess in this sense, it is more of the fact that they killed for love. So interesting ending, gave it a nice twist, and touched up the poem rather nicely. Good jub....job* kudos. |
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Re: slayer of false hope
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 10th December 2008 @ 09:25:05 AM AEST
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great ending, not what i was expecting. i think a lot of us would like to kill cupid at some point or other, if we could.
-phil |
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