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Daddy's little girl
Contributed by
forgottenjazzer
on
Friday, 13th October 2006 @ 03:49:39 PM in AEST
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Daddys Little Girl
When I was little,
I used to hold your hand,
I looked up to you,
When we walked through the sand.
Every year I got older,
And a little more bolder,
I started doing things on my own,
But always looking back to see if it was ok.
I am Daddys Little Girl,
The one who shares all those moments,
Those special moments,
With my Dad.
I remember when I used to dance,
Actually stand, on your feet,
While you danced with me,
And held my little body.
I am growing up now,
Im almost 18,
Ill be moving out soon,
But I will come back.
No matter what man,
I have in my life,
Trust me, You will Always,
Always be my ultimate favorite.
Now here comes my wedding day,
And soon your gonna have to say,
Say that you give me to this man,
This man who is the love of my life.
I will love and cherish this man,
But the love I have for him,
Will never change the love,
I have for my daddy.
Here I am with two kids now,
And you are a great grandfather,
We still spend those special moments,
We always will, for Forever.
Now I know your getting older,
And its getting close to the end,
All I wanted to tell you,
Is that, Im still your Little Girl
Even when you leave me forever,
I will always be here,
Thinking about you,
Saying I Miss you.
But no matter what,
I will ALWAYS be,
Yours,
Daddys Little Girl
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Re: Daddy's little girl
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by Rum on
Friday, 13th October 2006 @ 06:34:02 PM AEST
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| Its a cute concept but I think you could of carried it through a little better, it seemed a little sloppy. There was a couple akward lines like "For Forever" and "ultimate favorite" that just didn't flow. Also, the rhyming pattern needs a little organization. But seriously, when you got it right, you got it right! I loved the first stanza and just the overall idea! |
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Re: Daddy's little girl
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 14th October 2006 @ 04:38:52 PM AEST
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| I have to agree with Rum on Friday, the sentiments are all so true, I know, I have a Daddy's little girl, now 27, but the flow is lost along the way, still brought a lump to my thoat though. |
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