|
 Menu
|
|
|
|
|
Social
|
|
|
|
|
How I feel
Contributed by
jackee_line
on
Thursday, 26th October 2006 @ 01:58:29 PM in AEST
Topic:
hbadday
|
How to put into words how I feel.
Like waves crashing against the rocks,
tormenting them,
laughing as they keep slapping the rocks
saying ,
at least we have a place to go.
The rocks sitting there from beginning of time
bracing themselves for yet another assault
incapable of moving,
enduring the constant harrassment.
Then as if that was not enough
the waves slowly disappear into the sunset
leaving the rocks alone
to face another assailant.
Not friend but foe
too busy picking, pecking, probing
in every nook and cranny
taking everything, leaving nothing.
The rocks sitting there
as the world evolves around them.
How alone the rocks must feel
Just like me...
~*~
Copyright ©
jackee_line
... [
2006-10-26 13:58:29]
(Date/Time posted on
site)
Advertisments:
|
|
|
|
|
|
Sorry, comments are no longer allowed for anonymous, please register for a free membership to access this feature and more
|
|
All comments are owned by the poster. Your Poetry
Dot Com is not responsible for the content of any
comment.
That said, if you find an offensive comment, please
contact via the FeedBack Form with details, including poem title
etc.
|
|
|
Re: How I feel
(User Rating: 1 )
by annoiosa on
Thursday, 26th October 2006 @ 02:12:08 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
| I think maybe I kinda understand...when one problem or annoyance goes away, another one comes...like the rocks getting beat up by the waves, then seagulls come and peck at them...and you just can't do anything about it... |
|
|
Re: How I feel
(User Rating: 1 )
by GingerB on
Thursday, 26th October 2006 @ 02:30:31 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
Great Imagery Jackee, and I feel the emotions in this.
Ginny |
|
|
Re: How I feel
(User Rating: 1 )
by dougnut on
Saturday, 28th October 2006 @ 07:52:04 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
After reading this a couple of tomes I can empathise with how you feel, the words came from your heart .
It just goes to prove that even on BAD Days, some GOOD can come out of them. YOU wrote a Great poem.
Food For Thought.
Hugs from Doug. |
|
|
Re: How I feel
(User Rating: 1 )
by sararose1950 on
Thursday, 16th November 2006 @ 04:40:38 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
very well put into words- I know exactly how you feel-hugs- thank you for sharing
Peace and Light to you |
|
|
Re: How I feel
(User Rating: 1 )
by myheartsvoice on
Friday, 9th February 2007 @ 10:12:06 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
Wow, honesty sincerity and just plain beautifuly writtern and expressed. This line
said it all . . . " laughing as they keep slapping the rocks saying , at least we have a place to go. Excellent writting, and portrayal of your inner thoughs and emotions.
myheartsvoice
thank you kindly for your comment also.
|
|
|
Re: How I feel
(User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on
Saturday, 24th March 2007 @ 07:22:46 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
There is such a beautiful melancholy in this, jackee ..
A clear and painfully sad view of a tormented soul, but
done in an exceptionally beautiful way.
The imagery was breathtaking .. truly.
It softened the hopeless emotion that the poem
is draped in .. well done.
~Breezy |
|
|
Re: How I feel
(User Rating: 1 )
by sidneyconrad23 on
Wednesday, 17th November 2010 @ 04:03:52 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
| Another out standing write you know I guess we all feel like a rock some time all alone but we are not God is there and he's with you becuase he gave you that gift you have I know you will always keep writing good job. |
|
|
|
· 
Poetry
Site Help
Members
Areas
Reference
Search
Top
Others
