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The Rock Still Spins
Contributed by
deadheadpoet
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Friday, 27th October 2006 @ 04:07:24 AM in AEST
Topic:
ambiguous
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I feel I've walked on the most
jagged knife edges
getting way too close.
Glare of sun on steel
blinds the eyes
Hides all the alibis
Haunting lullabies as well.
You approach me with
a questioning glance
you fell into my trance;
a woody aura.
Tangled in branched webs
hanging on to the
edge of the spinning bed...
did you hear me whisper
what I said?
Some things can not be spoken
in audible tones in rapid
recession. Speak into this
can. Strings attached from
me to you.
Can you walk the tightened cord
between
or will you fall in the
amber waves of grain?
Ah in the madness of the
spin, the scalp rises in awe.
Eyes transfixed once again
sucking thoughts through
narrowed tunnels of dirt
from which I am buried
deep within.
You smile.
We laugh
Hollow hallways echo
in freakish tones.
Dancing...
unaware of my distance
in this light and sound.
Breathing in your exhale
and the rock still spins,
around.
10-27-06
Laura Horner
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2006-10-27 04:07:24]
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Re: The Rock Still Spins
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by Jackee_line on
Friday, 27th October 2006 @ 04:57:03 AM AEST
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| well done |
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Re: The Rock Still Spins
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by Willofree on
Friday, 27th October 2006 @ 09:45:25 AM AEST
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Laura,
This poem really intrigues me, although I'm not sure I fully understand it. I get a sense of two people trying to connect to each other, and trying to communicate. Yet there seem to be obstacles. Life is full of obstacles and distractions....yet close at the end..."Breathing in your exhale."
I may be way off on this one, my frieind
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Re: The Rock Still Spins
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by MisfitMe on
Friday, 27th October 2006 @ 12:47:49 PM AEST
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| Breathing of anothers breath has always struck me as one of the most intimate of exchanges. |
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Re: The Rock Still Spins
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by PhantomVampyress on
Friday, 27th October 2006 @ 12:51:34 PM AEST
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wow laurabean!! this is an interesting write.. it seems so full of thoughtfulness and feeling.. i really like this one.. great job..
JENNI |
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Re: The Rock Still Spins
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by ever1der on
Friday, 27th October 2006 @ 08:32:35 PM AEST
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| as long as the rock is spinning..it can't go under. This write is amazing. good job. |
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Re: The Rock Still Spins
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by jerseysue on
Saturday, 28th October 2006 @ 03:58:10 AM AEST
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| This is reallly good, It sounds cryptic, but is really understandable. Enjoyed it very much. Thanks for sharing. Sue xx |
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Re: The Rock Still Spins
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by yangdantien on
Saturday, 28th October 2006 @ 01:29:21 PM AEST
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To the mountains majesty of your piece as in great...
for within this seeming ambiguity here is a kernel of truth:
"Some things can not be spoken
in audible tones in rapid
recession..."
Few can even hear when it is
But as the rock spins we keep trying...
Peace
Yang |
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Re: The Rock Still Spins
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by lostinmyself on
Saturday, 28th October 2006 @ 08:48:30 PM AEST
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You know, I got much the same meaning from this as Will did. I agree with his comment most of all, I think, it truly does seem like a connection problem.
I like this. It's different and the rhyme sheme is nice to see. It's pretty original, and this poetry site sort of lacks originality at times.
Good write hun,
Phil xxx |
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Re: The Rock Still Spins
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Sunday, 29th October 2006 @ 05:05:15 PM AEST
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Laura, I have to agree with Will & Phil on this one~ I feel as if it's like you're trying to connect with someone, but there are too many obstacles that stand between you. You have an amazing way of expressing yourself through your poetry. I so much enjoy reading your work. Always varied and well worth the read. Keep up the awesome work~
big warm huggers,
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Re: The Rock Still Spins
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by Spike on
Tuesday, 31st October 2006 @ 05:05:47 AM AEST
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Indeed, intriguing and very personal, but still plenty of amazing imagery and genuine feeling to connect the reader.
A very happy, reconciled piece, this one.
S |
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Re: The Rock Still Spins
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 6th November 2006 @ 01:20:19 PM AEST
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Dunno about the rock spinning I clicked on your home page and was looking at your AV with that deadhead thing spinning round the skull S**** it's hynotic!
Anyway..onto your poem...I don't need to be spaced out to tell you this is a very good write.
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Re: The Rock Still Spins
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by trueecho on
Saturday, 2nd December 2006 @ 04:54:22 PM AEST
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| if there is any vision to awakening, its the rock spinning :) |
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