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Im learning as i go! (WARNING TEAR-JERKER)
Contributed by
joe89
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Saturday, 28th October 2006 @ 03:34:58 PM in AEST
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I
m the tender age of 7 and im learning as I go
I dont know how the television works, but hell id love to know
My dads my best mate in the world, everyday I tell him so!
Im the tender age of 7 and im learning as I go
Im the scary age of 15 and im learning as I go
I dont know how to woo a woman, but hell id love to know
My dad says its time I got a job, everyday he tells me so!
Im the scary age of 15 and im learning as I go
Im at the amazing age of 24 and im learning as I go
I dont know who ill meet tomorrow, but hell id love to know
My dad says I need to be responsible, everyday he tells me so!
Im the amazing age of 24 and im learning as I go
Im at the stressful age of 35 and im learning as I go
I dont know how ill pay the bills, but hell id love to know
My dad says I need to find better work, everyday he tells me so!
Im the stressful age of 35 and im learning as I go
Im the healthy age of 46 and im learning as I go
I dont know were ill take the kids, but hell id love to know
My dads back isnt what it used to be, everyday I tell him so!
Im the healthy age of 46 and im learning as I go
Im the middle age of 58 and learning as I go
I dont know where my kids are now, but hell id love to know
My dad I know, is a silly old fool, everyday I tell him so!
Im the middle age of 58 and learning as I go
Im the tired age of 67 and im still learning as I go
I still dont know how the telly works, but hell one day ill know
I miss you dad, your still my best mate, but now youll never know
I need you dad, youre my greatest teacher, im still learning as you know.
Love you Dad...
Copyright ©
joe89
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2006-10-28 15:34:58]
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Re: Im learning as i go! (WARNING TEAR-JERKER)
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 28th October 2006 @ 03:59:49 PM AEST
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| Please take this as a critique, it has great content but too much of the samething over and over for me.............Mike |
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Re: Im learning as i go! (WARNING TEAR-JERKER)
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by MisfitMe on
Saturday, 28th October 2006 @ 06:08:08 PM AEST
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I loved it, simply loved it! And unlike the one who commented before me, I find the repetition not at all too much,(Not in that sing songy way that sometimes happens) instead I found the structure very much a part of the meaning. Hope I got it right! There's so much in here & the esteem you hold for your father...well...you were right, "A tear jerker"
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Re: Im learning as i go! (WARNING TEAR-JERKER)
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by saj on
Saturday, 28th October 2006 @ 08:33:02 PM AEST
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| wow! a tear jerker indeed! |
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Re: Im learning as i go! (WARNING TEAR-JERKER)
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by angelfreak on
Saturday, 28th October 2006 @ 11:36:08 PM AEST
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| That is fantastic. I hope you share it with your dad so he knows how much you treasure him. |
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