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Wish Kiss
Contributed by
yangdantien
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Monday, 30th October 2006 @ 11:15:30 AM in AEST
Topic:
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Sparking against the black empty
I have little tinder to take flame
too busy and busted till bankrupt
my cookies break so easily
these days.
Pour milk in bowl, grab a spoon
as I have a graduate degree
in taking it on the chin.
I miss the visiting muse I never had
low pressure lens full harvest moon
April's cruelty felt here.
I am glad the rains keep wet the resolve
against the friction wheels turning.
A sleight of hand and mind
so instead make bread
you bring the butter and
we will slurry and toast in flight.
Here is a wish of one thousand blessings
laid upon you.
All crossroads met
with a sure sense of direction as
your inner compass remains ever handy...
Seems royal turmoil
bestows upon poet trees
confluences from which
wordsmiths
hammer upon the minds anvil.
Touch be touched
desire not lukewarm but hotly
for strength enough to align
the inner cardinal points
of true to heart.
With ear to the ground
learn to further distinguish
ones racing pulse from the
approaching hoof beats of loving.
When finally face to face
kiss alot, sharing breath,
merge cheeks & think of
outer space
where mercilessly
none can take none for granted.
AJPIII
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yangdantien
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2006-10-30 11:15:30]
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Re: Wish Kiss
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by deadheadpoet on
Monday, 30th October 2006 @ 12:37:27 PM AEST
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AJP,
I am not much on critiquing others works...I do not feel competent to do so. *smiles* I did notice a couple of misspells, but that is just blah blah stuff. I thought the piece intriguing and mysterious, as I find much of your other work to be. I quite enjoy reading you and discovering you, in each piece you print. There is so much that I like about your words here, I could not say which stanza I like the best.
I will say, I am glad you found us, YPDC, and I hope you stay.
Peace and hugs,
Laura |
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Re: Wish Kiss
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Monday, 30th October 2006 @ 04:33:46 PM AEST
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Hey AJP~
The first I read of your wonderful writes. I have to admit I'm impressed. Although I too, must second my dear friend Laura's comment. Glad you found your way to us at YPDC. I hope to read more of your splendid work. Keep it up AJP~
warm hugs n prayers,
Sue M |
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Re: Wish Kiss
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by MisfitMe on
Wednesday, 1st November 2006 @ 05:13:44 PM AEST
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"Sharing breath..."It doesn't get too much more intimate than that!I like it,I really like it.Good job!
BigLoveMuchPeace,
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Re: Wish Kiss
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by CuriousitysCat on
Sunday, 14th January 2007 @ 11:58:06 AM AEST
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Well done, I think that deserves a round of applause [claps] lol Anywho this seemed rather abstract but rad nonetheless. My favorite part:
"All crossroads met
with a sure sense of direction as
your inner compass remains ever handy..."
It gives me hope considering the numerous times I have come to crossroads with no sense of direction or where to go or what to do, so I often spend time idle until the wind kind of gives me a swift kick to the rear in some direction [often off the beaten path].
;]
~JaZz
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Re: Wish Kiss
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 13th March 2007 @ 08:18:29 PM AEST
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"I miss the visiting muse I never had"
I quoted you there, because, to me, that is so intimately telling of a poet ...
breathtaking, the muse of many thoughts and emotions, yes?
But the need or want for something different, mayhaps something
more, lingers in poetic air .. (even if that's not how you meant it ..
I like that I got that from it.) It makes us reach further, methinks ~
This whole piece, to me, seems like a falling.. falling into a love
that none other would dare be compared. For none other could
be compared, with that last stanza the sealing of the kiss ...
Excellent and thought provoking AJ .. as are the mass of your writes ..
~Breezy |
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