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Post Mortem
Contributed by
JoeyTrib1550
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Sunday, 5th November 2006 @ 01:00:05 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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Post Mortem
Lying on the cold ground, naked
In the darkness of my own despair
For I love a woman out of reach
A love so strong, too much to bare
My heart beating just for you
Pumping poison through my veins
Like acid burning my mind
Only the thought of you remains
Like a rose growing in my heart
Full of longing and desire
Drenched in loving thoughts
Setting my feelings on fire
Its roots gripping my thoughts so tight
Slowly infesting all of my mind
Squeezing my brain with thorns so sharp
Cutting my eyes, making me blind
Blood oozing out of my eyes
Mixing with the tears Ive shed
Lying helplessly in the dark
My vision blurred with red
Roots gliding along my bones
Thorns stretching my skin
Wrapping my lungs in its grip
Puncturing as I breath in
Inexorable growing in me
Ripping my rib cage apart
Now standing alone in the dark
Is the rose, shadow of my heart
Turning from red to black
Withering, petals falling off
Dropping in a pool of blood
Swimming in my love
Leaving my empty body behind
Motionless, cold, sickly white
I see her standing next to me
A blurred shape in the light
Growing fainter, almost gone
Roots gripping tighter and tighter
Ripping everything apart
The light shining brighter and brighter
Swallowing her and all my thoughts
My soul growing numb, though hurting still
My heart rotting within my shell
All empty, decayed, no more blood to spill
An empty stare, looking up in the sky
A heart left only to rive
Over and over again, tears streaming,
Dropping on the ground, for I am still alive!
Copyright ©
JoeyTrib1550
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2006-11-05 13:00:05]
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Re: Post Mortem
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by deathdrop on
Sunday, 5th November 2006 @ 02:29:55 PM AEST
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WOW!
this is mind-blowing!
that's the only thing that explains this!
it's awesome!
yet darkly griping. i was glued to read this right to the end and still wanted to read more!
it's amazing! |
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Re: Post Mortem
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by Franko on
Sunday, 5th November 2006 @ 02:44:33 PM AEST
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wow.......very emo.
lol not but seriously, this is a very good poem. I would check the pace of some of the lines, because for me, bits of it don't scan.
Check out some of my work sometime! |
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Re: Post Mortem
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by The_Unknown on
Sunday, 5th November 2006 @ 02:47:56 PM AEST
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This is amazing! Well done Marc, see I told you, you are good.
This is a great write Marc, keep it up. Look forward to seeing more of your poetry!!
Luvs ya!
.::Jess::. |
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Re: Post Mortem
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by darkangeleyes57 on
Wednesday, 8th November 2006 @ 12:36:36 PM AEST
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This is AMAZING!!! I love every single stanza and every single line... This is so good... I loved it... Great poem...
Take care
Christina |
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Re: Post Mortem
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by babylugz on
Saturday, 30th December 2006 @ 07:59:37 PM AEST
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Oh my god you have done it again! Excellent. I really am a big fan. Keep up the good work.
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Re: Post Mortem
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by evangelise on
Saturday, 20th June 2009 @ 04:18:32 AM AEST
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| Excellent, well written, kept me gripped for the next word all the way through . Well done |
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