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Tunnel Vision
Contributed by
yangdantien
on
Monday, 6th November 2006 @ 10:41:22 PM in AEST
Topic:
abstract
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Words look back;
closely,
they stare up.
As readers peer upon
each line of text
made aware
as spoken
mercurial wings
deliver the action
of consciousness.
The hidden impresses little
what it hides behind
is but the curtain pulled back.
Petals sprout blooming cervical
in uterine dreams concentrate
from such hope
comes the survival of our species.
Yet for her it is warmth in the heart
hugging the belly,
each dimple kissed.
The presence of the stanza
forward drives behind
a power that
covers miles before lids close.
Try making a fist with a hole,
press one eye affectionately,
telescope what has your attention
and view the moment
just a bit smaller.
please switch orbs till comfortable.
AJPIII
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yangdantien
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2006-11-06 22:41:22]
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Re: Tunnel Vision
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by shelby on
Monday, 6th November 2006 @ 10:46:21 PM AEST
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Aj,
my words elude me when I read your work.
You touch something deep within.
Each word is a new adventure into spirit.
This is true heart and soul and poetic talent at its best.
Moved once more
~Michelle~ |
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Re: Tunnel Vision
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by MisfitMe on
Tuesday, 7th November 2006 @ 10:55:06 AM AEST
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I love words that take both my heart & head to be understood...I love your words!
BigLoveMuchPeace,
MisfitMe |
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Re: Tunnel Vision
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by deadheadpoet on
Tuesday, 7th November 2006 @ 01:46:40 PM AEST
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My dear brother, reading you I feel I am lost with in your poetic word tunnel. The first line just sucked me in...
"Words look back;
closely,
they stare up."
Nice. I really dug the last stanza as well....and the last line...
"please switch orbs till comfortable"
It is a pleasure to read you.
Peace and hugs,
Laura |
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Re: Tunnel Vision
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 7th November 2006 @ 02:31:01 PM AEST
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I find the second stanza extremely pleasing. You hold the context of this piece together VERY well!
The last line is a wonderful wrapup! |
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Re: Tunnel Vision
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Wednesday, 15th November 2006 @ 11:45:15 PM AEST
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Dearest AJ~ I'm so sorry that I just don't have the right words to give your poem all the credit that it deserves. I can't point out any particular part of your poem cos it's all written so well. A very clever and talented poet you sure are dearest AJ~ A pleasure to visit your pages. Shine on my friend~
love, hugs n prayers,
sue m |
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