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Sticks and Stones
Contributed by
PoeticHybrid
on
Tuesday, 7th November 2006 @ 02:35:23 PM in AEST
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You tell me that I'm broken
That I have no real heart
You tell me I've so much to learn
You can't tell me where to start
Sticks and stones
Will break my bones
But words will
never hurt me
Sorry that you can't relate
That you think I don't care
But to tell me I wasn't there for you
How could you dare
Sticks and stones
will break my bones
But that won't keep me
From protecting you
I was there to keep you safe
When your inner demons won
I was the one who emptied
those bullets from your gun
Sticks and stones
Will break my bones
But time for fighting
is done
I can't be to blame
for all of life's twists
I can't keep stitching
Those cuts along your wrist
Stick and stones
Will break my bones
But there is only
so much I can take
My only choice is to push you
Completely out of my life
You just don't seem to listen
It's just not worth your strife
Sticks and stones
Will break my bones
But your demons
Will destroy you
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Re: Sticks and Stones
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 7th November 2006 @ 02:51:29 PM AEST
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Clever play on a childs verse!
Yet there is nothing childish about the emotions this brings to the surface.
Nice blend. |
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Re: Sticks and Stones
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by EddieDean on
Tuesday, 7th November 2006 @ 03:17:44 PM AEST
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Nice work, I can see where you are coming from in this write. Its hard always being there to protect and help your friends, only to be pushed away, ridiculed and rejected.
Its a hard thing to to, to push away one of your friends, but sometimes, it must be done.
Very good work!
Eddie Dean |
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Re: Sticks and Stones
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by Light_to_your_Darkness on
Tuesday, 7th November 2006 @ 03:51:33 PM AEST
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| This is wonderful, full of emotion and strife, you did good work :) |
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Re: Sticks and Stones
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 7th November 2006 @ 09:39:28 PM AEST
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| I really enjoyed reading this. I loved the flow and the message is very true. It's terrible how some peoples depend of and take advantage of others sometimes. Nice work. |
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Re: Sticks and Stones
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by books_4gal on
Wednesday, 8th November 2006 @ 12:20:19 AM AEST
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| There are those that take, and those that give.....it easy to see in this instance who the giver is. A reminder of the price for caring.........excellent use of well-known verse and fresh aspect. |
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Re: Sticks and Stones
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by shelby on
Thursday, 16th November 2006 @ 11:23:03 PM AEST
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I loved the entire sticks and stones play throughout this.Good job.
~Michelle~ |
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Re: Sticks and Stones
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by one-curly-fry on
Friday, 17th November 2006 @ 09:11:52 PM AEST
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Wow - this is very good!
I love the blend of techniques. The use of the old saying, the story flow and the rhyme all work well together. I like the progress through to the end conclusion about the relationship - sounds like a very complicated situation and it sounds like you were doing all the fighting while the other was stubbornly sticking to a self-destructive path.
Great write!
- Tim |
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Re: Sticks and Stones
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by Tynx on
Tuesday, 21st November 2006 @ 10:08:18 PM AEST
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| ouch |
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Re: Sticks and Stones
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by Man_On_High on
Saturday, 21st July 2007 @ 10:01:08 AM AEST
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it's painful enough to read..
can't imagine how much more painful the experience was..(for the both of you)
Warmest regards..and well wishes~
B |
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