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let go
Contributed by
blackrose233
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Sunday, 12th November 2006 @ 12:40:46 AM in AEST
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Im falling, Im floating, Im dieing, Im holding on, glass fingernails scrach at my soul, Im gripping on a spike pole I wish I could just let go.....
Im the devils voodoo doll everyday another kneedle
demons screaming loudly
Im the devils voodoo doll everyday another kneedle.
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Re: let go
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by ever1der on
Sunday, 12th November 2006 @ 01:05:42 AM AEST
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I think it's needle..unless the k is just your style..the only other thing I'd say is the lines could be rearranged to give it more power. For example:
Im falling, Im floating, Im dieing.
Im holding on.
Glass fingernails scrach at my soul.
Im gripping on a spike pole.
I wish I could just let go.
Im the devils voodoo doll.
Everyday another kneedle.
Demons screaming loudly
Im the devils voodoo doll.
everyday another kneedle.
just a suggestion~
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Re: let go
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by tearstained_soul on
Sunday, 12th November 2006 @ 03:11:14 AM AEST
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hey, i like the suggestion that girl left :)
favorite line- glass fingernails scratch at my soul |
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Re: let go
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 12th November 2006 @ 02:15:38 PM AEST
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| There are so many things in my life that I wish I could let go of but they continue to haunt me. This is a lovely poem! |
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