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Self Actualized through Your Eyes
Contributed by
jyssvw
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Friday, 17th November 2006 @ 01:50:50 PM in AEST
Topic:
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The more I get to know you
The more I love you
The less tense we become
The less things will change
The silence will bring us home
The silence can make us dance
The rainbow placed as a crown
The rainbow sits in shallow earth
The kiss of a lifetime
The kiss that stung lips of gold
The moment of forever
The moments of clarity in lucid dots
The mentioning of your name
The mere mention of your name
The butterflies which rise from stomach pains
The butterflies which die in cocoons of cries
The enemy is within
The enemy is not without sin
The pleasure is brought from outside
The pleasure is deceptive
The anger is pent up
The anger is fed up
The malingering slacker dozes off
The malingering procrastinator folds his cloth
The shocking behavior is disturbingly soft
The shocking display is retched and raw
The air is sweet like grass
The air is meant to keep the lungs from collapse
The sky is blue and the sun is gray
The sky keeps the stars close and shields the heat
The energy is matter in space
The energy is mass of time kept encased
The moment of goodbye is sad in retrospect
The moment of goodbye has been hung by its neck
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Re: Self Actualized through Your Eyes
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by hauntedscorp on
Friday, 16th March 2007 @ 03:27:27 PM AEST
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So much to love about this write! For starters; I like the way each stanza starts off with the same two words, and how one line is positive/optimistic, and the second line is the flipside; the negative/pessimism. Then you switch it up halfway through, almost like you're doing a he said/ she said, and then closer to the end it's more of a mesh of both...like two worlds, or minds if you will, coming together. Very creative and thought-provoking!!!
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