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Ship of Fools
Contributed by
MisfitMe
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Thursday, 30th November 2006 @ 05:58:24 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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By defeatist pursuance of a doomed state~
he disallows in other than to lie his fate
Thus with my own now intrinsicly linked~
I've naught but manned the helm of this ship on we'll sink...
Charged with the task of keeping us on course~
towards the failure he refuses to be from divorced
Although, for a spell we might anchor in safe port~
he's not long satisfied when no disaster he courts...
So he awaits my falling asleep to anchor lift~
for as long as I keep my eyes closed letting us drift
Then when back to awareness, I arrive~
& see what destructive ends towards, he's strived...
That he will of abandon on my shoulders the weight~
which further opportunity is then from create
For him to again raise the knife behind my back~
to this time perhaps a sail or rigging attack...
Sabotaging anew what efforts for us, I make~
his misdeeds blamed for 'til with mutinous tears I shake...
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Re: Ship of Fools
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by shelby on
Thursday, 30th November 2006 @ 06:48:12 PM AEST
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Delightful write my friend
Michelle |
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Re: Ship of Fools
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by yangdantien on
Thursday, 30th November 2006 @ 07:09:40 PM AEST
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Good to read you have disembarked and perhpas a lovelubber once again to have senses excited and alive and meet in kind, however;
a dark and powerful take on a wounded union or love...
differences and mistrust can often rock the boat of coupling:
"...'til with mutinous tears I shake..."
as certainly tearfulness would seek to take the rule and steer back but you shook it off sailed toward sunset and found your way to this poem and website.
Peace
AJ
PS Personal I like my mashed potatoes Lumpy... |
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Re: Ship of Fools
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by tearstained_soul on
Thursday, 30th November 2006 @ 10:38:40 PM AEST
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For him to again raise the knife behind my back~
i havent checked your poetry out in awhile but im glad i decited to stop by when i did b.c this is a VERY well writeen poem! i love it. i, like always, posted my fav. line above! good luck w/ writing more amazing poems, though im positive you don't need any luck :) tty w/e i see you've written something new :) |
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Re: Ship of Fools
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by ever1der on
Friday, 1st December 2006 @ 12:13:20 AM AEST
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| amazing..real poetry. |
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Re: Ship of Fools
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Friday, 1st December 2006 @ 12:43:13 AM AEST
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Kerry~
Do you now see what I have been talking about?
My gosh girl what ever you write about you always do it with style. Your work is always varied, interesting and most impressive.
As for this particular write it's very sad and I can tell you you write from a wounded heart.
There's a whole world out there to explore my friend. Go for it and let your light shine brightly~
love, hugs n prayers,
sue m |
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Re: Ship of Fools
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 1st December 2006 @ 10:44:26 AM AEST
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I hope you threw him overboard!!
Cleverly done, flows nice and endears one to the writer through several emotions!
Awsome! |
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Re: Ship of Fools
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by deadheadpoet on
Friday, 1st December 2006 @ 10:51:55 PM AEST
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Kerry. This is actually the second time I've read this. Sometimes I am simply at a lose of words. Sometimes I feel if I rattle on, I won't quit. LOL First of all the title is like one of my favorite Dead tunes. (I got married in a Ship of Fools tie-dye) Ya know, I think I get your meaning here, with the ship of fools. Some times a marriage can feel like a pretty scary ship ride. Relationships are definitely no easy ride and we all tend to be foolish at times. Don't let this man, run you down. Be strong. Keep writing.
Much peace,
Laura |
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