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Elusive...
Contributed by
MisfitMe
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Thursday, 7th December 2006 @ 03:23:47 AM in AEST
Topic:
insomniac
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She's never twice found~
the same as once seeming
Inspired & willful~
she smiles while screaming...
She confronts the obvious~
for what it appears
Though its meaning she allows~
to remain unclear...
One after the other~
she runs hot & cold
To herself keeping secret~
what's paid for when told...
Wanting what she wants~
with both eyes on the prize
Left blind to her own needs~
she's yet to realize...
Whether close or distant~
together or in turn
Within her always reigns~
the unknown for she yearns...
So she takes every path~
& arriving nowhere
'Til the sleep against fought~
must be winner declared...
And in having to succumb~
her frustrations by heightened
Knowing once more she'll awaken~
no further enlightened...
Unable to find answers~
outside of them dreaming
She's never twice found~
the same as once seeming...
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Re: Elusive...
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by Balmain_Tiger on
Thursday, 7th December 2006 @ 07:41:05 AM AEST
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| Seems once the answers come so to the prize will allow dreaming |
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Re: Elusive...
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by PhantomVampyress on
Thursday, 7th December 2006 @ 09:07:29 AM AEST
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cool write on insomnia..I can relate.. i get insomnia alot.. i like the approach you took with this poem and how you put into words about insomnia awesome job thanks for sharing
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Re: Elusive...
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by yangdantien on
Thursday, 7th December 2006 @ 11:28:04 AM AEST
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Methinks your bold pen has arrived...Time to get published the moon is your friend you know and there are angels wings ready for flight.
I especially liked:
'...she smiles while screaming...
She confronts the obvious~
for what it appears
Though its meaning she allows~
to remain unclear...
One after the other~
she runs hot & cold..."
Sometimes you dont get the authors intention for a piece as well crafted lines can be very effective for whole other purposes filled with meaning for the reader...I was lost in the above and stopped there woolgathering wondering if you knew my ex as she could be alot like that...
Well Done
Peace
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Re: Elusive...
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by deadheadpoet on
Thursday, 7th December 2006 @ 12:47:07 PM AEST
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Sounds like me and my many moods. LOL I can relate.
Insomnia can really suck.
Peace and hugs,
Laura |
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Re: Elusive...
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by Honey56 on
Thursday, 7th December 2006 @ 01:26:40 PM AEST
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| Nice...Nice...Nice |
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Re: Elusive...
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Thursday, 7th December 2006 @ 05:34:19 PM AEST
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You and your writing have made a big impact here @YPDC. I have become a real big fan of your outstanding poetry dearest Kerry~
Insomnia ah the wicked times of sleepless nights, lol, I can so much relate to that.
Well done my dear friend and keep up the excellent work (I'll try recounting those wooly things called sheep again in my sleep, lol)
love n hugs from ur fan/friend,
sue m
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Re: Elusive...
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by Janet on
Sunday, 4th March 2007 @ 03:58:58 AM AEST
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| As an insomniac, I can relate to this poem so well. Very nice job. Janet |
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