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The Rat and the Hamster
Contributed by
the_cowardly_lion
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Friday, 8th December 2006 @ 09:20:48 PM in AEST
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the rat and the hamster
the rat is a lowly, lonely lout
and when ladies see him they often freak out
the only thing going in his limited life
is his limitless freedom to go wherever he likes
the hamster on hand, is a beautiful, cute
cuddly warm creature few will dispute
whose life revolves round the tumble of a cage
her own little show, but not her own little stage
so why does the rat give up the most that he has
to come see her show and hear all that jazz
all the time baring a giggling grin
happy and proud of what shes accomplished within
oh how hes mastered his scrupulous smile
tho she lives in this cage its him in exile
so why does he come back, isnt it clear?
tho they cant be together, they can always be near
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Re: The Rat and the Hamster
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by lost_chadow on
Friday, 8th December 2006 @ 10:49:28 PM AEST
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| The sky and the sea, Narcissus and Echo, this one is in league with the old epics...or at least its reminiscent of them. |
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Re: The Rat and the Hamster
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by wizard on
Saturday, 9th December 2006 @ 10:22:01 AM AEST
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nicely done!
wiz |
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Re: The Rat and the Hamster
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by books_4gal on
Sunday, 10th December 2006 @ 12:56:22 AM AEST
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Endearing, that's the first word that came to mind upon reading this poem. But I admit the tag line is what caught my interest.
Thanks for the chuckle. :) |
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Re: The Rat and the Hamster
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by brew on
Sunday, 10th December 2006 @ 09:20:38 PM AEST
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What a cute Post........Hey Rats,a nd hamsters can be cute togther.! Keep penning
Brew~ |
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Re: The Rat and the Hamster
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Tuesday, 19th December 2006 @ 06:29:34 PM AEST
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My I have missed reading your work. Thanks so much for the chuckle. A cute and most enjoyable write. Thanks so much for sharing it with us~
warm hugs,
sue m |
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Re: The Rat and the Hamster
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by MisfitMe on
Tuesday, 19th December 2006 @ 06:53:34 PM AEST
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This derserves a resounding teehee
"TEEHEE!!"
BigLoveMuchPeace,
MisfitMe |
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Re: The Rat and the Hamster
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by Clarity_Rising on
Saturday, 13th January 2007 @ 11:59:48 PM AEST
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What a very creative set of characters!
Although I must admit, I would not
call any of your future lovers a hamster,
no matter how cute and cuddly those
creatures are. Excellent job on this poem,
and great use of metaphors.
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