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untitled
Contributed by
PhantomVampyress
on
Sunday, 10th December 2006 @ 08:46:31 PM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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The Smell of smoke
still lingers ther
by the chair where I used to sit
nothing there but the ash of what was and is no more
I'm long gone
now you can write your song
you didn't think I could be so strong
the smell of smoke still lingers there
by the cellar stair
where I used to sit
and all that remains of the ash of my ciggerate
of all the past burnt out
JENNI
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2006-12-10 20:46:31]
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Re: untitled
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by emystar on
Monday, 11th December 2006 @ 05:35:42 AM AEST
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Very sad but well written..
big huggs,
emy |
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by shelby on
Monday, 11th December 2006 @ 02:08:02 PM AEST
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Loved the play on words here nicely done, really made the reader feel it.
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Re: untitled
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Wednesday, 13th December 2006 @ 05:14:03 PM AEST
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Heya Jenni~
Although short you have managed in so little words to make your reader feel your sadness. The past is in the past where it should stay. Here's to a much brighter future. Well done Jenni and thanks for sharing your post with us~
love n hugs,
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Re: untitled
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 22nd December 2006 @ 09:43:45 AM AEST
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A great show of strength and having moved on.
No title yet?...Ash of What Was? |
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by myheartsvoice on
Monday, 8th January 2007 @ 12:42:02 AM AEST
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This poem is tragicaly beautiful, i love the verse about sitting on the cellar stairs. Talk about vivid, your poetry is like little paintings you can't take your eyes off of. I like every thing i 've read by you. You write very well indeed.
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