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Deceit
Contributed by
errious
on
Tuesday, 12th December 2006 @ 11:37:01 AM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Awe-Inspiring colour
Brown and Flickering
Beauty
Elegance and
Love leading
Into a Trap,
A hole, an abyss
Of Endless hatred
Eyes like Death
Misleading and expressing
Unfortune,
Like a fly, caught
In a spiders
Web, struggling,
Struggling, dying,
Lifeless and limp
Evil, how to
Describe the feeling and
Hate
That she Casts
Upon her next victim,
beckoning, seducing into
The lair of death
And burning Hell
The betrayal felt as
She walks calmly and
Happily
The love and deceit
The anger and hate
You dont understand
Though you recognise
But...
Can only you see the evil within?
Copyright ©
errious
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2006-12-12 11:37:01]
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Re: Deceit
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by NDean on
Tuesday, 12th December 2006 @ 12:21:12 PM AEST
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End: I like the end however I think the 2 lines above the last one could be tweaked a little.
Overall: Really good. For some reason I like how you see evil as a 'she', as though 'she' seduces with her darkness. Very good.
Nathan
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