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Oh yes, you'll fit
Contributed by
reprobate
on
Friday, 15th December 2006 @ 10:30:47 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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No, you can not have what there was before
The clock has seen to the closing of that door
You may not advance to the very next stage
It isn't permitted simply because of your age
The machine's vastly improved over its start
Even the controller seems aware of its part
Yeah, all systems' operating without a hitch
Still, it appears that there's the tiniest glitch
No, you're not a child that may just sit and play
It's time now for all of your toys to be put away
Just so you know, there's better times to be had
I'm sure that when preteen's over you'll be glad
The grace that comes with reaching this phase
Leaves much to be desired in the coming days
It truly is such a lonely place and time for you
You've passed one yet can not touch that new
NO...guess that you've heard that more than any
It's just a word too often used, by way too many
Just remember, that life is so rough for everyone
And there will be plenty of yes's before your done
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I'm not certain if this is permitted here or not, but I thought I'd share a couple of his favorites...
Exclusive live performances & music videos of metal, hardcore & hardrock artists - Mastodon, Shadows Fall, Trivium, & tons more -- http://uvtv. info
Jingle bells played backwards -- this is cool and crazy!!!!!! http://pub.sinuspl.net/flash/Jingle_Bells_Reversed.swf
If this is not allowed, I apologize.
*Moderators/Person in Charge/ Somebody? -- Math check...3(# of comments required) x 93(# of my posts) = 279 which is less than the 420 comments I have submitted. Why only 2 posts allowed?* Thanks
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Re: Oh yes, you'll fit
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by MisfitMe on
Friday, 15th December 2006 @ 11:07:07 PM AEST
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I can't wait to share this w/ my teen~rager daughter.lol.
Great job, I so completely enjoyed this!
BigLoveMuchPeace,
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Re: Oh yes, you'll fit
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by Essentially9 on
Friday, 15th December 2006 @ 11:11:41 PM AEST
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| i love your ending. i certainly cant wait to get out of my teenage years. i loved your poem, the rhymes, the concept, and everything. great post. =]] |
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Re: Oh yes, you'll fit
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by The_View on
Friday, 15th December 2006 @ 11:19:34 PM AEST
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| Really liked it, good job! |
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Re: Oh yes, you'll fit
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by SilverDagger on
Saturday, 16th December 2006 @ 03:28:13 AM AEST
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| Hey, that was quite a cool way of expressing what adolescence is all about. What you've written are things that I've gone through, and am going through now. Your optimistic last lines really made my day. I hope that that is what happens! |
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Re: Oh yes, you'll fit
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by brew on
Tuesday, 2nd January 2007 @ 06:54:58 AM AEST
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Great job....But, How can it be meant , just for teens.? lol.....at my age of 26 its meant as well.....!!!!! Seems, some have struggling times, throughout...Keep posting, and dont stop. Sure missed your words of wisdom, and beautiful thoughts. PM ..me..
Take care and Hugs
Brew~ |
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Re: Oh yes, you'll fit
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by little_genna on
Tuesday, 22nd January 2008 @ 02:13:00 PM AEST
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ok yes ive seen trivium and mastodon live. ive just finished going through my teens. just so your son knows mastodon suck live lol.. but they were the support act for TOOL.. which seriously are one of the best bands on the planet...
this so captures everything that a teenager thinks is happening to just them. its crazy but it happens to everyone.... love this poem..yeh thats right i loved it! |
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