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Answer
Contributed by
CuriousitysCat
on
Monday, 8th January 2007 @ 11:57:42 PM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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Spinning half way and back
So fast
My head whips round
And it's here on the
Border between standing
And loosing my balance
I realize I would let
Myself fall
With closed eyes
Anyway my body
Looses itself to
But if I keep my balance
It feels like I may shoot
Out of my head like
A sky rocket
And to where I aim
I'll have no clue
But it all makes
Sense
Ask if this concept
Doesn't wrap itself
Around you
But listen and find my
Answer in your mind...
Copyright ©
CuriousitysCat
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2007-01-08 23:57:42]
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Re: Answer
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by MisfitMe on
Tuesday, 9th January 2007 @ 04:53:14 AM AEST
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I love this...
" But listen and find my
Answer in your mind..."
Good job, Babez
BigLoveMuchPeace,
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Re: Answer
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by PhantomVampyress on
Tuesday, 9th January 2007 @ 01:19:46 PM AEST
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I love the flow of this and the expression in it.. very melodic words .. awesome job
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Re: Answer
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by deadheadpoet on
Tuesday, 9th January 2007 @ 01:50:03 PM AEST
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I liked the way you penned this piece. I really do love that ending.....
"Ask if this concept
Doesn't wrap itself
Around you
But listen and find my
Answer in your mind...."
Nice stuff.
Peace, Laura |
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Re: Answer
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by yangdantien on
Tuesday, 9th January 2007 @ 09:29:34 PM AEST
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Really well crafted to tread upon the third and fourth 'wall' (Often depending upon how a stagebuilder numbers the sides of the stage, the third or fourth wall is an imaginary barrier that separates the events on stage from the audience. The idea is that the stage background is constructed with a cutaway view so that the people sitting on the audience can look through this invisible "fourth wall" and look directly into the events inside.)
All delivered in 24 lines and 92 words including title.
An excellent poetic compression of finding answers in the dizziness of the spiral...
This piece also reminds me of the careful and ancient art of the Ladylike controlled 'fainting.'
Let Go! Let Flow!
Well Done
Peace
Yangdantien |
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