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Virgin Skin
Contributed by
CuriousitysCat
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Wednesday, 10th January 2007 @ 11:08:21 AM in AEST
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Virgin skin
Pale and lined
Untouched
And I'm sinking in
Drawing myself over it
I feel some of these days
Slip away
And leave me in my own suffocating haze
Comfortable
After I've closed back up
And forgotten how vulnerable
I get when it comes to
Virgin skin
Pale and lined
Untouched
And I'm sinking in
Drawing myself over it
I know that I've given yet another peice
Of myself
And I'm back to how I have to be
Inside
Of me
After I've closed back up
And forgotten how vulnerable
I get when it comes to
Virgin skin
Pale and lined
Untouched
And I'm sinking in
Drawing myself over it
Inside and out
It's all that I am
When it comes to this
And my thoughts begin to taper
Off
Through myself and this pen
Onto virgin skin that's pale and lined
Paper...
~Me
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CuriousitysCat
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2007-01-10 11:08:21]
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Re: Virgin Skin
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by yangdantien on
Wednesday, 10th January 2007 @ 12:24:47 PM AEST
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Clearly this piece has personal meaning for the writer and by your preface it says so...
As a reader I walked through the sinews and muscle of this piece. It has a reveal and elegance as it meanders, reinforcing 'pale and lined,' to touch the reader with the an innocence that is most refreshing.
I truly look forward to more of your hearts expressions.
Peace
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Re: Virgin Skin
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by PhantomVampyress on
Wednesday, 10th January 2007 @ 12:53:20 PM AEST
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wow a beautifully penned piece and its worded so expressively.. great wording and well expressed.. awesome job
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Re: Virgin Skin
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by deadheadpoet on
Wednesday, 10th January 2007 @ 05:29:23 PM AEST
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A stunning write....yeah to the virgin paper, that we can stroke and love with our pens. Nice stuff.
Peace and hugs,
Laura |
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Re: Virgin Skin
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by MisfitMe on
Thursday, 11th January 2007 @ 01:28:10 AM AEST
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I love this for so many reasons, but I'll try to keep it to a minimum...like & as if, teehee.
Through the majority of this write I had a hard time reconciling the concept of, " pale virgin skin " w/ " lined " & kept reaching for what it was you might be saying that in the end was so obvious & led me to a second reading to enjoy w/ understanding...then another...& another...
Great job, Babez!
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Re: Virgin Skin
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by Clarity_Rising on
Saturday, 13th January 2007 @ 11:47:56 PM AEST
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I can relate to this poem. There is something
truly beautiful about a blank sheet of paper.
An artist or poet can manipulate it to portray
any expression or thought they wish. Your
poem is lovely, great work!
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