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losing hope
Contributed by
Phantomvampyress
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Wednesday, 10th January 2007 @ 06:21:32 PM in AEST
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Emptiness flows
anger comes and goes
screaming in vain
"God please take away the inner pain!"
broken; beat down
into a void of darkness I drown
losing control
trying to fulfill a hope
waiting for an answered prayer
but nothing is there
vampyress Jenni
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2007-01-10 18:21:32]
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Re: losing hope
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 10th January 2007 @ 06:36:44 PM AEST
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It's hard sometimes - to pull ourselves out of these ruts we tend to get ourselves into. But the seemingly weakest of people step up at the most unexpected of times and prove to have more strength than anyone would have thought. You'll pull through, things will get tough at times, that's life, keep your chin up and force yourself not to look down, because there's always a bright light ahead. Won't see it if you're looking down though.
Very nice poem, an enjoyable read.
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Re: losing hope
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by xxthexforgotenxonexx on
Wednesday, 10th January 2007 @ 06:41:33 PM AEST
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sometimes when we reach the lowest it only goes up =] i bet something good happend after you wrote this
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Re: losing hope
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by myheartsvoice on
Wednesday, 10th January 2007 @ 08:20:43 PM AEST
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How does one not agree with you on this peice? a lovely write not to mention a lot of thruth in what is said here. As usual you've connected again.
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Re: losing hope
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by shelby on
Wednesday, 10th January 2007 @ 09:35:28 PM AEST
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Though the moment was dark you wrote a lovely poem about your experience with it. May the darkness and ruts be gone from view sweet Jenni
Michelle |
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Re: losing hope
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by darkangeleyes57 on
Thursday, 11th January 2007 @ 08:49:57 AM AEST
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Bad days are always horrible.. I hate those days.. This poem was really good... I liked the flow and it was really enjoyable... Bad days come and go.. Hold in there and stay strong..
Take care
Christina |
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Re: losing hope
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by Drapes on
Thursday, 11th January 2007 @ 06:21:24 PM AEST
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It's very nicely written - good job!
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Re: losing hope
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Sunday, 14th January 2007 @ 06:32:15 PM AEST
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Jenni~
I like the way you have written this. It's short, deep & powerful. May sorrow and darkness never touch your heart again my dear friend.
love n hugs,
sue m |
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Re: losing hope
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by Vampirequeen on
Tuesday, 16th January 2007 @ 04:58:50 PM AEST
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Sometimes its hard to deal to life alone .
I sometimes feels that way and i say that is not a good feeling.I am glad your better now.
great write
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Re: losing hope
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by yangdantien on
Tuesday, 16th January 2007 @ 10:50:57 PM AEST
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Really good and it holds up for you... I love that in a poem. Especially the ones we write off the cuff to compress and process the negative.
May you ever be so blessed with answers and healing.
Peace
Yang |
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Re: losing hope
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by Bleedthelove on
Thursday, 25th January 2007 @ 11:16:28 AM AEST
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| I can strongly relate to the emotions in this piece. Beautifully written. Excellent job. |
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Re: losing hope
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by Loriann on
Wednesday, 21st February 2007 @ 03:42:33 PM AEST
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I can really relate to this poem. It is how I have felt for so long . It is great the way you expressed it all.
Great job.
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