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The Problem With Stars
Contributed by
Rakerman1999
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Wednesday, 17th January 2007 @ 11:50:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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If long ago the star has died
then why do I yet see its light
there among a million points
and shining brightly in the night?
You are still my sacred beacon
I will not believe you're gone
ever guide me through the darkness
lead me safely to the dawn.
In the quiet I sense your presence
glowing warmth seems oh so near
and I listen to the silence
as if perchance this fool might hear
whispered words of reassurance
" I would never leave your side
Faith my dear, a little longer
and I will dry each tear you've cried "...
Ever guide me through the darkness
lead me safely to the dawn
You are still my sacred beacon
I will not believe you're gone
There among a million points
and shining brightly in the night
if long ago the star has died
then why do I yet see its light?
L. Carling c2007
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Rakerman1999
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Re: The Problem With Stars
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by shelby on
Thursday, 18th January 2007 @ 12:11:58 AM AEST
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Seems like the darkness with the stars and moon is calling us all of late. This is dreamy, softly spoken and the stars look on.
Beautiful......
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Re: The Problem With Stars
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by glassicallyunsuperficial on
Thursday, 18th January 2007 @ 05:13:44 AM AEST
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I like this poem, its also about hope appearing in times of hopelessness.
Good Write!
cheers,
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Re: The Problem With Stars
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by NoSaint on
Thursday, 18th January 2007 @ 06:44:19 AM AEST
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beautifully written as is your way
Shari |
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Re: The Problem With Stars
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by Drapes on
Thursday, 18th January 2007 @ 07:23:18 AM AEST
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I really like this. It has a smooth flow, good rhythm. VERY well written, great word choice. Just a very, very well written piece. Great job, thanks for sharing!
-Drapes |
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Re: The Problem With Stars
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 18th January 2007 @ 10:50:50 AM AEST
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I can slip into this and mourn right along side you, so well have you expressed yourself.
I truly think that as each person touches us in our lives whether thay are passed or just gone for now, they leave a part of themselves with us. I will always cherish that.
Thanks for the diffrent view. |
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Re: The Problem With Stars
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by PhantomVampyress on
Thursday, 18th January 2007 @ 12:33:19 PM AEST
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wow this is beautifully dark.. yet it gives hope to you.. very exquisite writing..
vampyress jenni |
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Re: The Problem With Stars
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Thursday, 18th January 2007 @ 07:16:34 PM AEST
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Larry you are a true poetic master who eloquently pens such outstanding masterpieces to captivate your reader & leave them in awe.
People always leave a mark on our hearts be it present or past. You have done an excellent job with this. Tip of the hat to ya my dear friend.
love n hugs ur fan/friend,
sue m |
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Re: The Problem With Stars
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by yangdantien on
Thursday, 18th January 2007 @ 09:23:53 PM AEST
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Cast as a prayer, an insight, a hope to understand for the problem lies in us...
I really liked this and it made me remember a play on a child's rhyme devised by Anonymous:
"Twinkle Twinkle little star I no longer wonder what you are for by spectroscopic ken I know you are made of Hydrogen"
Well Done
Peace
Yangdantien |
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Re: The Problem With Stars
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by brew on
Thursday, 18th January 2007 @ 09:26:42 PM AEST
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FOr we, inpervise for all sorts........Seems more than others...! Great write, well flowed words that put ones thoughts to another. Liked it alot
Brew~ |
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Re: The Problem With Stars
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by Vampirequeen on
Thursday, 18th January 2007 @ 09:32:42 PM AEST
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I agree with Michelle there.
you know you never disapoint me in your writes .truely amazing and beautiful.
hugs |
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Re: The Problem With Stars
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by Willofree on
Thursday, 18th January 2007 @ 10:15:36 PM AEST
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The poem strikes me as a cosmic metaphor to depict a loving and intimate connection. The beacon of light is perhaps your spiritual liason....
Well done,
Will |
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Re: The Problem With Stars
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by Clarity_Rising on
Thursday, 18th January 2007 @ 10:53:52 PM AEST
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Excellent use of imagery
and symbolism. I’m falling in
love with your poetry. Every poem
I read is more beautiful than the
next. Exquisite write!
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Re: The Problem With Stars
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by Clarity_Rising on
Thursday, 18th January 2007 @ 10:59:19 PM AEST
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Excellent use of imagery
and symbolism. I’m falling in
love with your poetry. Every poem
I read is more beautiful than the
next. Exquisite write!
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Re: The Problem With Stars
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by ever1der on
Sunday, 21st January 2007 @ 11:45:10 AM AEST
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This is great as always. It seems to be without a flaw; or maybe I'm just blind to them...can't wait to see what will come next.
mary |
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Re: The Problem With Stars
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by Wachumiri on
Sunday, 21st January 2007 @ 10:16:45 PM AEST
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This is beautiful. What lives in us will never die, all that light illuminated will always remind us of the light.
Take care,
David |
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Re: The Problem With Stars
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by zenith66 on
Monday, 22nd January 2007 @ 06:28:03 PM AEST
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wonderfully in touch with youre inner self,
An amazing imaginative peace.
5 stars***** |
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Re: The Problem With Stars
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by myheartsvoice on
Wednesday, 24th January 2007 @ 07:16:07 PM AEST
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More than a lovely peice of writting, but a question that bare's answering, hope you find one.
Thank you also for your comment.
myheartsvoice |
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Re: The Problem With Stars
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by Fionndruinne on
Saturday, 27th January 2007 @ 06:27:53 PM AEST
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Hear, hear! I get the sentiment expressed herein perfectly. Something well worth saying, and reading (and saying again, and reading again).
Bravo.
Andrew |
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Re: The Problem With Stars
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by stillstitch on
Monday, 29th January 2007 @ 08:46:52 AM AEST
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Interesting perspective, Larry. The stars have captivated me many a night. Laughed at me, too. I love the lines about the dead stars still giving off their light...star light...star bright....
Lovely as always, my friend.
StillStitch |
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Re: The Problem With Stars
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 14th February 2007 @ 12:41:46 PM AEST
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Oh my dearest Larry ~
Such a sadness and longing in this, but there is so much
more to love about this piece than the sentiments and
emotion you always seem to easily evoke in me.
I adore how you took the last stanza and rearranged it
to mirror the first. Love that. It somehow makes the piece
even more dramatic and powerful.
This was impossibly romantic, though very, very sad.
daisies for you, my friend, because they are the "cheering
up flower" [they are too HAPPY to be sad. :)]
~Breezy
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Re: The Problem With Stars
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by trueecho on
Sunday, 6th May 2007 @ 04:39:52 AM AEST
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when we look up the stars we see show us the enormity of space..i love this becuase you ryme it nicely..thanks for your comment on my poem "To L" as chance would have it..the "L" in my poem is also name Larry..
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Re: The Problem With Stars
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by blueheart on
Wednesday, 18th July 2007 @ 02:53:56 AM AEST
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| Larry, I enjoyed this very much. Thanks for shraing. :) |
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