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I Can Hear Her Heartbeat...
Contributed by
UrMyInspiration
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Monday, 22nd January 2007 @ 10:57:39 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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The pounding waves of an angry ocean,
Does not compare to the sound of her broken heart...
It echoes louder in my crowded mind,
Getting stronger every moment that we spend apart...
I confessed to her that she was my every breath,
During my spill of emotion, I told not one lie...
Years of a romantic whirlwind,
Ended in nothing but an angry Goodbye...
Tonight before I closed my eyes to dream, I realized...
I have watched her cry more than a thousand tears...
Crying with me or without me,
Each tear was filled with a memory of so many years...
She once said "Our lives are going on without each other...",
I finally grasp the amount of truth in her words.
The sadness, the pain, the sorrow and lack of strength...
All of these twisted emotions she endures...
I can still hear your heartbeat. It haunts me.
To be continued.
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Re: I Can Hear Her Heartbeat...
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by seafire on
Monday, 22nd January 2007 @ 11:12:17 PM AEST
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i really liked this poem it was so touching the words are so hmm i dont know what to say emotional in this one it made me cry god bless great write cant wait to read the rest
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Re: I Can Hear Her Heartbeat...
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by ButchCorpuz on
Tuesday, 23rd January 2007 @ 02:04:26 AM AEST
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Nice! This is really good! I enjoyed reading your poem.
I'll wait for the rest of it. Keep writing!
Butch Corpuz |
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Re: I Can Hear Her Heartbeat...
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by PhantomVampyress on
Tuesday, 23rd January 2007 @ 09:59:13 AM AEST
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wow this is a powerful and emotional write.. a wonderfully written piece for a first write.. this is very touching.. it kinda made me sad. you can feel the emotion in this.. awesome job keep writing
vampyress JENNI
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Re: I Can Hear Her Heartbeat...
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Tuesday, 23rd January 2007 @ 05:45:45 PM AEST
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This is an excellent first submission. Your poetic talent is on display and you express yourself so well through the power of your pen. A powerful, touching and heartfelt piece of writing. I await the continaution of this excellent poem. Well done~
warm hugs,
sue m |
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Re: I Can Hear Her Heartbeat...
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by Bleedthelove on
Wednesday, 24th January 2007 @ 01:33:03 PM AEST
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| Poetic beauty redefined. Your a very beautiful writer. You inspire me. |
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Re: I Can Hear Her Heartbeat...
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by shelby on
Wednesday, 24th January 2007 @ 08:22:51 PM AEST
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Incredible for the first one. I will continue to follow your work. I am all for heart soul and emotion and when a poem moves me and makes me feel I quickly enjoy it
Michelle |
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Re: I Can Hear Her Heartbeat...
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by MomentOfHappiness on
Friday, 29th August 2008 @ 04:20:32 AM AEST
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| The title caught my eye and the rest of the poem kept my attention. I can feel the emotion as if i were witnessing those tears falling. Very well done. |
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Re: I Can Hear Her Heartbeat...
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by Bleedthelove on
Tuesday, 3rd February 2009 @ 07:22:12 PM AEST
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| ...And I Can Still Hear Yours......Oh How I Miss You.... |
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